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ealdgyth
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I often avoid romances because of overused plots and tropes. But this has been a pleasant surprise. This story feels like a Kpop TV romcom -- one can almost see the drop dead gorgeous Lee Min Ho stepping out in the male lead's crisply tailored suits, amidst the glossy, light-washed scenery. Slice of life details further emphasize this mood, as one is drawn into the world of our heroine, Shao Yan. MC is someone every career girl could relate to. She's single, has just left a failed relationship, and is determined to start life over in a new city. Compared to her dazzling male lead, she is very normal, very average. Therein lies the implied plot conflict, how this seemingly ordinary everywoman, who aspires only to succeed in her job, is swept off her feet and becomes an unlikely Cinderella. Is it for real, or is she repeating old mistakes? This is not your usual melodramatic love story with face-slapping, emotional abuse, and poor girl-gets-rich man-and gets her revenge storyline. Conflict builds up slowly. In fact a possible antagonist doesn't appear until Chapter 45, and a back story about the MC and this villain is not given until Chapter 50. Readers who want more drama and action might not appreciate the lack of intensity, however those who prefer a light romance to relax to, a few chuckles here and there, real-life office drama, and fluff and snu-snu will enjoy it. Since it's only the middle of the story, and the plot is still developing, it's too early to tell how the story will be sustained. It's the main reason I haven't given it a perfect score. For now it's a welcome respite to see a strong and independent MC who is neither a ***** nor a dragon lady, and a leading man portrayed in a positive light, who is not a bully or an overbearing CEO. Grammar and idiomatic expressions can be polished, structure and pacing can be tightened so it's not dragging, but overall these do not get in the way of one's reading experience. Kudos to Author Gold_Paper_Crane. May your source of inspiration never run dry!

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Gold_Paper_Crane
Gold_Paper_CraneAuthorGold_Paper_Crane

๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜ omo thank you! ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™ You captured what Shao Yan felt perfectly there. And I could also see the Lee Min Ho that you portrayed there ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š Thank you so much. It is exactly how I want the readers to feel. I'm trying to portray a real life situation as much as possible. I am glad you enjoy the ride so far. I am definitely working to improve my writing and I hope it's getting better over chapter by chapter. Looking forward to see your second review ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜โ™ฅ๏ธ

ealdgyth
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Well, you have succeeded at keeping me -- someone who prefers fantasy-adventures -- here, so isn't it a good sign? ๐Ÿ˜‰ Yup, Lee Min Ho should play Daniel, if this novel becomes a TV series. Ku Hye-sun (his co-star in "Boys Over Flowers") is my choice as Shao Yan. Pretty but not flashy. Strong and down to earth. Awkward and funny, especially when the impossibly handsome ML pays her attention. ๐Ÿ˜… The chapters are improving, not just in content, but also grammar. I gave you more stars in the later chapters. And I read through ALL before writing this review. It's best if you can find an editor. It takes another pair of eyes to spot those tiny lapses. I am glad your novel is not another cheesy CEO story! Hahaha! I absolutely hate those. Just reading the titles make me throw up. Keep it up, Gold! Waiting for the next chapter! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป

Gold_Paper_Crane:๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜ omo thank you! ๐Ÿ™๐Ÿ™ You captured what Shao Yan felt perfectly there. And I could also see the Lee Min Ho that you portrayed there ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜Š Thank you so much. It is exactly how I want the readers to feel. I'm trying to portray a real life situation as much as possible. I am glad you enjoy the ride so far. I am definitely working to improve my writing and I hope it's getting better over chapter by chapter. Looking forward to see your second review ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ˜โ™ฅ๏ธ
Gold_Paper_Crane
Gold_Paper_CraneAuthorGold_Paper_Crane

โ™ฅ๏ธโ™ฅ๏ธโ™ฅ๏ธ Thank you! I am looking for an editor now ๐Ÿ™ hopefully I can find one soon. It will help me to release faster too!

ealdgyth:Well, you have succeeded at keeping me -- someone who prefers fantasy-adventures -- here, so isn't it a good sign? ๐Ÿ˜‰ Yup, Lee Min Ho should play Daniel, if this novel becomes a TV series. Ku Hye-sun (his co-star in "Boys Over Flowers") is my choice as Shao Yan. Pretty but not flashy. Strong and down to earth. Awkward and funny, especially when the impossibly handsome ML pays her attention. ๐Ÿ˜… The chapters are improving, not just in content, but also grammar. I gave you more stars in the later chapters. And I read through ALL before writing this review. It's best if you can find an editor. It takes another pair of eyes to spot those tiny lapses. I am glad your novel is not another cheesy CEO story! Hahaha! I absolutely hate those. Just reading the titles make me throw up. Keep it up, Gold! Waiting for the next chapter! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป
RuleBreaker
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Lovey dovey,, bruuuhh