Review Detail of anon88 in Wonted Hostelry

This is a review of the first two chapters. The female main character transmigrates for no apparent reason to a game based world where she must start her life anew. She doesn’t have a system attached to her. Overall, I found the story confusing due to two general reasons. First, the are problems with the construction. There are subject verb agreement issues. The story also seems to jump from topic to topic without clear transitions. Second, the second chapter doesn’t seem to fit with the first. I almost thought that I had changed books. Both the grammar and plot cohesion were of a higher level than the first chapter. I would enjoy this story more if the first chapter is re-edited.