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Cassa1
Cassa1Lv45yr
2020-01-08 05:35

This story definitely has it’s moments. The first few chapters were a bit sluggish to wade through, but it’s passable. Most of my negative experience from this is a run on sentence or laughably unedited chapters. There are some definite highlights within here, but it is locked behind some content that most would stop at. Should give this a read if you have seen your fair share of some pretty sluggish intros. -Spoilers!- The most egregious of the unedited chapters is when Chrome attacks the starting city. In chapter 38 - Unaltered quote from this scene, “ charged forward in a soeed thatvwasn’t seen yet and their jumping abilities and used them and their fearlessness to jump ...” This scene instantly broke any semblance of immersion I had . I would definitely recommend either a proofreader, grammerly, or an editor. -Spoiler end!- In the end, this is a decent novel that has a sluggish start and needs a editor of some kind to fix some basic problems. Probably will stop reading at chapter 62 as the author put some pretty obvious soon to be romance into the thing. But that’s just personal preference. Not meant to be rude to the author or anything, but some proofreading will help the novel a lot.

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