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Aysel_Inara
Aysel_InaraLv105yr
2019-09-29 16:48

Stating the title first it's pretty good enough to catch attention. Moving onto the plotline it's very rushed and the author has neglected the MCs emotions badly, at least in initial chapters. Reader is unable to dive into the storyline completely thus the novella is reduced to just storytelling. I hope author works on it for better along with the world building which I felt was a bit ambiguous. Now quoting the good points grammar usage is pretty fine, though a little practice is needed. That's because author maybe is non-English and it happens to most here. The storyline is typical cliché but I believe author will pull out something unique out of it. As I can predict, it's a good work to read. ❤

An accidental romance

Peachwoodgirl6
4.5
67 Chs

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Peachwoodgirl6
Peachwoodgirl6Author

Thanks a lot, I will try to improve my writing.

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Aysel_Inara
Aysel_InaraLv10

Your story is potentially good. A few things are lacking. If wanna discuss with me specifically I'll love to help for free, haha.

Peachwoodgirl6:Thanks a lot, I will try to improve my writing.
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Peachwoodgirl6
Peachwoodgirl6Author

I want to discuss with you

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Aysel_Inara
Aysel_InaraLv10

We can't chat that much here. Amy other platform you're available?

Peachwoodgirl6:I want to discuss with you
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Peachwoodgirl6
Peachwoodgirl6Author

Facebook? Are you available there

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Aysel_Inara
Aysel_InaraLv10

Yeah. Find me there.

Peachwoodgirl6:Facebook? Are you available there
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Peachwoodgirl6
Peachwoodgirl6Author

My ID is Anjali Gupta. I have sent friend request.

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Aysel_Inara
Aysel_InaraLv10

Gotcha!

Peachwoodgirl6:My ID is Anjali Gupta. I have sent friend request.
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fattzey
fattzeyLv10

It fun to read this novel but I hope the update will be consistent & regularly...can't wait to read more...I have high hope for this novel..keep fighting,author....😘😘😘🎈🎈

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MizA
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Hi. I was invited to read this novel and read it up to chapter 10, so my review is about what I’ve read so far. I think the author has a very complex story here, full of plot twists and support characters. It’s not a simple romance (and the romantic bit is not simple, too!): it has a mystery aura that seems to grow as the chapters go. I’d like to advice the author to rewrite her synopsis in a way the events are not disclosed in the way they are now. It might confuse your new readers. The first chapters are a bit in a rush as the events unfold quickly and superficially; anyway you can symphatize with the lovely Angel, as many characters do, by the way. Somewhere later, a new plot twist will take Angel to (oh, I can’t tell, it’d be spoiler). But you get it. It’s not a story to be bored at. I believe you, as me, will not discover so quick which is the guy that will get her heart (is it a spoiler?). We all should stay to find out.

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GD_Cruz
GD_CruzLv5

I actually know someone who went through this similar situation... but she didn't get out of it. So the feels is real. :( Thankfully, Angel was able to save herself. Now she'a struggling to make ends meet but she seems to be doing fine? (Idon't think I spoiled anything there so no spoiler tag. Lol) Still, there's a thread that seems to be just out of the reader's reach and it is this sort of mystery that interests me. Glad I found this novel. It's on my wall now. Keep it up, author, and good luck to you!

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_Sha
_ShaLv10

I met first such smooth writing style, and the its brings a sense a flow in the reader which is the most admirable thing, and I also felt a sense belonging too. I like it I must say. Writers learn with the time Goodluck author

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Ingrid100
Ingrid100Lv14

Reveal spoiler

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Shanu17
Shanu17Lv1

This the first novel I had studied in this app. I like the plot but it has too much mystery. I still couldn't decide who the main lead is. But it is still readable . Keep up the good work.

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Sukanyagupta2009
Sukanyagupta2009Lv3

This is the second novel I am reading on this app I like how simple the story is in the start and how complicated it has been become in just seven chapters. I think the viewers should give this story a chance this is refreshing and interesting.....

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Rani_Gupta_3978
Rani_Gupta_3978Lv3

This is the first novel I read in Web novel my friends suggested it and I quite like the plot it is interesting I am looking forward to see who is the male protagonist.

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Sillyaditya
SillyadityaLv4

I like the story building so far. characters are too suspicious and it has some history too that increases your curiosity. To know more about the story you read further but all you got is another mystery at some point you realise that you got the main lead but the next moment you got someone else.

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Daddypeachgirl6
Daddypeachgirl6Lv2

I have read chapters its just that something similar happened with my friend she married to a wrong guy and he used to beat her every day in the end she ran away when I read the story I just remembered my friend I think this story is worth giving a chance

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