It a Really Good Fanfik but I go out ( after 18 chapter when Terumi must be with Naruto ) and hate thise fanfik because all good girls will be with Naruto, but with MC... 💩💩💩💩💩( only Samui is good as for me) and its the reason why I go out and dont wont read more thise.... because its like the Naruto MC

Well **** me sideways it's a great read..............................................................................................................................................................

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Author here~~~~~~~~~~~~ I'm glad that people like this fanfiction, the earlier chapters are badly written of course, since this is my 1st time writing, but remember, i said in the beginning that am writing from my phone so some errors will pass through without me knowing. I have university and am literally studying both medicine and programming, so i really get tired afterwards. Any sane person would have drop this story but not me, i want to finish it, to truly finish it. The 1st couple of chapters are badly written, something i will fix in the future, so if your still writing then am happy you like the story, if you don't then just leave and read other story. Due to university, my chapters will come at least 1 every week, but after December comes, i'll be able to write even faster due to my having no university. Once December comes, i'll also fix those chapters but until then, i'll leave them where they are, otherwise i won't be able to release once every week due to me fixing those chapters, so please just hold until December. REMEMBER I DON'T HAVE A LAPTOP AND I CAN ONLY WRITE THROUGH MY PHONE. I hope you can understand that. This has been the Author, peacing out ^-^

Holy Pu'ssy i like it baby ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Reveal spoiler

Me agrada el fondo que le llegas a dar al clan kurogane, pero si se supone que son la sombra del uzumaki y que siempre están para protegerlos, su unica cualidad es poder absorver chakra del entorno? Sabiendo que el uzumaki tiene mayor cantidad de reserva de chakra, un físico más fuerte, y siendo un clan de sellos, me parece que la historia del clan kurogane esta bien, pero sus caracteristicas, no. El mc de tu historia parece ser el secundario mientra que naruto, el mc del canon, se le da todo, con quien se queda cada uno da igual porque ahi se ve con quien te gustaría verlo, pero siento que no le has dado un desarrollo a naruto y a kira lo hiciste totalmente desarrollado mentalmente, por mas que sea una reencarnación, no es como si en su anterior vida haya sido asesino, mercenario, o vivido en un ambiente hostil. Creo que no le das buen desarrollo a los personajes, sino que sólo los basas en tu opinión, mas no les das un argumento, el perfecto ejemplo es sasuke, recién le sucedió de la masacre a su familia y lo tildas por algo que no hizo en tu historia, ademas creo que sasuke sufrió también, ten en cuenta que su hermano al cual admiraba un dia sin razon alguna para el, asesino a todo su clan. Son muchas cosas que deberías mejorar, en lo personal tu idea me parece fantastica ya que nunca vi una historia con ese inicio, pero no supiste llevar bien, tuviste muchas ideas pero no te paraste a pensar lo suficiente.

Is BlueScorpion, or any other editor still working on this? I peeked in the later chapters and saw that grammar gets a little better, though, still not good enough. Question is, should I read it with a hope of a decent grammar? Or should I just forget about this novel?

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