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leonel551
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I was really enjoying the novel until the author decided to make it so retarded with his mom getting kidnapped, right after just escaping a hell hole, even worse he actually listens to a stranger just after she was kidnapped only so he could have a connection to the hero school, as if anyone with that amount of power anyone would care for what a stranger says in that moment, worse of all he actually deletes the flying thunder seal when is impossible to erase unless you know about seal to a master level, even for obito after minato mark him in naruto. If you wanted to make a connection with the plot should have the mother kidnapped all the fight with all might and rescue with his help and the flying thunder seal instead of just leaving his mother to the grace of God for who knows how long! 🤦‍♂️🤦‍♂️🤦‍♂️

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Strongest Ninja In A Hero Society

Vermillion_Yormsky

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Daoist198784
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I haven’t read your novel, but I still think I’ll fucking send you.

Vermillion_Yormsky:sigh... makes no sense you say? Did I explain the circumstances already? Has the story been completely written? I won't rewrite the scene as I don't think I've written myself into a corner.
dopeboii
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Yeah like he’s the only one with ninja knowledge how did they delete the seal. And how can’t he find them with his powers.

Vermillion_Yormsky
Vermillion_YormskyAuthorVermillion_Yormsky

*Sigh,* I guess the very act of doing something to develop the plot, so long as it disturbs the MC is in itself "retarded." "He listens to a stranger," you say? Well, who the **** isn't a stranger to him after he left the country that enslaved him like less a day after the escape. AND HE ACTUALLY LISTENED? Holy Shit! Can you believe that he actually listened?! It's fucking preposterous! Anyone and everyone knows that just because you have supreme strength you automatically know what's for the best. Better yet, the strongest never listened to others, especially not "weak strangers..." You can't erase the flying thunder god seal without being a seal master of the highest order? Fine, I'll give you that... Yeah, no; that only applies in the ninja world, WHICH THE STORY'S NOT WRITTEN IN. This is a fucking superhuman based society with uncountable Quirks of all types. In the manga, there's already been a guy that can disassemble and reassemble anything and everything he touches. Another guy can fucking disintegrate anything his hand touches. The last example I'll give is, A FUCKING LITTLE GIRL THAT CAN REWIND TIME. Could it really be that hard to image a Quirk that could erase a seal? -Written by a salty Vanilla-Boi

leonel551
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Na man is your story do what you want but still even if it is tag tragedy doesn't mean you have to make his life a living hell i mean he just escaped 10 years of slavery! Couldn't you have his mom successfully kidnapped later on? Besides that the story is good, but can you decide if he is going to be a kid or *****? Is a he a reincarnator or simply a child that consumed the soul of the *****?

Vermillion_Yormsky:*Sigh,* I guess the very act of doing something to develop the plot, so long as it disturbs the MC is in itself "retarded." "He listens to a stranger," you say? Well, who the **** isn't a stranger to him after he left the country that enslaved him like less a day after the escape. AND HE ACTUALLY LISTENED? Holy Shit! Can you believe that he actually listened?! It's fucking preposterous! Anyone and everyone knows that just because you have supreme strength you automatically know what's for the best. Better yet, the strongest never listened to others, especially not "weak strangers..." You can't erase the flying thunder god seal without being a seal master of the highest order? Fine, I'll give you that... Yeah, no; that only applies in the ninja world, WHICH THE STORY'S NOT WRITTEN IN. This is a fucking superhuman based society with uncountable Quirks of all types. In the manga, there's already been a guy that can disassemble and reassemble anything and everything he touches. Another guy can fucking disintegrate anything his hand touches. The last example I'll give is, A FUCKING LITTLE GIRL THAT CAN REWIND TIME. Could it really be that hard to image a Quirk that could erase a seal? -Written by a salty Vanilla-Boi
leonel551
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Na man is your story do what you want but still even if it is tag tragedy doesn't mean you have to make his life a living hell i mean he just escaped 10 years of slavery! Couldn't you have his mom successfully kidnapped later on? Besides that the story is good, but can you decide if he is going to be a kid or *****? Is a he a reincarnator or simply a child that consumed the soul of the *****?

Vermillion_Yormsky:*Sigh,* I guess the very act of doing something to develop the plot, so long as it disturbs the MC is in itself "retarded." "He listens to a stranger," you say? Well, who the **** isn't a stranger to him after he left the country that enslaved him like less a day after the escape. AND HE ACTUALLY LISTENED? Holy Shit! Can you believe that he actually listened?! It's fucking preposterous! Anyone and everyone knows that just because you have supreme strength you automatically know what's for the best. Better yet, the strongest never listened to others, especially not "weak strangers..." You can't erase the flying thunder god seal without being a seal master of the highest order? Fine, I'll give you that... Yeah, no; that only applies in the ninja world, WHICH THE STORY'S NOT WRITTEN IN. This is a fucking superhuman based society with uncountable Quirks of all types. In the manga, there's already been a guy that can disassemble and reassemble anything and everything he touches. Another guy can fucking disintegrate anything his hand touches. The last example I'll give is, A FUCKING LITTLE GIRL THAT CAN REWIND TIME. Could it really be that hard to image a Quirk that could erase a seal? -Written by a salty Vanilla-Boi
Webzayne
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You're actually retarded man, do the world a favor and delete the review, its invalid. You're just complaining because the story isn't how you want it to be. Literally, that's your COMPLAINT. It's not criticism, it's just complaint after complaint. If you want to critique about the execution of a scene go for it, but you're just bashing the concept of the novel. If that's the case, go write your own, please, I'd love to see it so I could do the same **** to you.

leonel551:Na man is your story do what you want but still even if it is tag tragedy doesn't mean you have to make his life a living hell i mean he just escaped 10 years of slavery! Couldn't you have his mom successfully kidnapped later on? Besides that the story is good, but can you decide if he is going to be a kid or *****? Is a he a reincarnator or simply a child that consumed the soul of the *****?
leonel551
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Not even the author say anything but here comes the annoying fool that take everything so serious to the point of getting mad over nothing, well good luck with your life i guess hope your the same in the real world not just hot air in the internet!👌👌👌

Niko91
Niko91Lv5Niko91

You know that suffering mc is kind repetitive most authors use it because they think that it add somthing to the story but it became overused so now it a cliche, but i digress you have a good story but the kidnapped mom make no sense and opened a big plot hole : 1. why didn't they trie to kidnapped the mc. 2. you say that he loves his mom but he doesn't devot all the time to find here and joining the heroes is illogical they can't help him 3.so how did they erase the seal (big hole) Just rewrite the scene in an attempted kidnapped and keep the same plot but with his mother so easy to fix.

Vermillion_Yormsky:*Sigh,* I guess the very act of doing something to develop the plot, so long as it disturbs the MC is in itself "retarded." "He listens to a stranger," you say? Well, who the **** isn't a stranger to him after he left the country that enslaved him like less a day after the escape. AND HE ACTUALLY LISTENED? Holy Shit! Can you believe that he actually listened?! It's fucking preposterous! Anyone and everyone knows that just because you have supreme strength you automatically know what's for the best. Better yet, the strongest never listened to others, especially not "weak strangers..." You can't erase the flying thunder god seal without being a seal master of the highest order? Fine, I'll give you that... Yeah, no; that only applies in the ninja world, WHICH THE STORY'S NOT WRITTEN IN. This is a fucking superhuman based society with uncountable Quirks of all types. In the manga, there's already been a guy that can disassemble and reassemble anything and everything he touches. Another guy can fucking disintegrate anything his hand touches. The last example I'll give is, A FUCKING LITTLE GIRL THAT CAN REWIND TIME. Could it really be that hard to image a Quirk that could erase a seal? -Written by a salty Vanilla-Boi
Vermillion_Yormsky
Vermillion_YormskyAuthorVermillion_Yormsky

sigh... makes no sense you say? Did I explain the circumstances already? Has the story been completely written? I won't rewrite the scene as I don't think I've written myself into a corner.

Niko91:You know that suffering mc is kind repetitive most authors use it because they think that it add somthing to the story but it became overused so now it a cliche, but i digress you have a good story but the kidnapped mom make no sense and opened a big plot hole : 1. why didn't they trie to kidnapped the mc. 2. you say that he loves his mom but he doesn't devot all the time to find here and joining the heroes is illogical they can't help him 3.so how did they erase the seal (big hole) Just rewrite the scene in an attempted kidnapped and keep the same plot but with his mother so easy to fix.
Niko91
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Still make no sens it a realy veary big hole in the plaot . Why go with the heroes wen sole he would try to infiltrate the villas find info faster and not be constrained by laws that all hero must follow.

Vermillion_Yormsky:sigh... makes no sense you say? Did I explain the circumstances already? Has the story been completely written? I won't rewrite the scene as I don't think I've written myself into a corner.
Vermillion_Yormsky
Vermillion_YormskyAuthorVermillion_Yormsky

Ok, what makes more sense: 1) Abide by the laws of society while you train to get the skills to find your mother. Employ the help of others while you train and stick to an already established good moral code. Or 2) Yeet the law into orbit and randomly target villains both big and small in the small hope that perhaps you may run into those that kidnapped your mother. Forget other innocent people's privacy as you run through the world with your Byakugan scanning each and every person as you can't just check chakra signatures. And if Heroes try to stop you just incapacitate them. Who cares if you just paralyze them or knock them out, even murdering them should be acceptable as they're in your way; the rest of the world can just plunge into chaos for all you care. Don't think about what your mother might think of you after she get's rescued and don't bother with the worthless society that barred you from searching for her either. Yes, just rescue her — if you happened to luckily find her that is since there are NO LEADS TO GO BY — and live out a lonely existence where she may or may not understand where you're actions came from. Mhmm🤔

Niko91:Still make no sens it a realy veary big hole in the plaot . Why go with the heroes wen sole he would try to infiltrate the villas find info faster and not be constrained by laws that all hero must follow.
soulshocker
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Your whole aim was for him to join the heroes so you wrote a plot to force him to join the heroes, it’s your strategy write whatever you want everyone has different opinions

Vermillion_Yormsky:Ok, what makes more sense: 1) Abide by the laws of society while you train to get the skills to find your mother. Employ the help of others while you train and stick to an already established good moral code. Or 2) Yeet the law into orbit and randomly target villains both big and small in the small hope that perhaps you may run into those that kidnapped your mother. Forget other innocent people's privacy as you run through the world with your Byakugan scanning each and every person as you can't just check chakra signatures. And if Heroes try to stop you just incapacitate them. Who cares if you just paralyze them or knock them out, even murdering them should be acceptable as they're in your way; the rest of the world can just plunge into chaos for all you care. Don't think about what your mother might think of you after she get's rescued and don't bother with the worthless society that barred you from searching for her either. Yes, just rescue her — if you happened to luckily find her that is since there are NO LEADS TO GO BY — and live out a lonely existence where she may or may not understand where you're actions came from. Mhmm🤔
DevinDevin
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The guy can throw the element's around like it's nothing and can unlock the Rinni which can control gravity to some degree not accounting for the other paths he has with it. He also has the tensigan which he can also get, Also who cares just capture the villains and turn them in.

Vermillion_Yormsky:Ok, what makes more sense: 1) Abide by the laws of society while you train to get the skills to find your mother. Employ the help of others while you train and stick to an already established good moral code. Or 2) Yeet the law into orbit and randomly target villains both big and small in the small hope that perhaps you may run into those that kidnapped your mother. Forget other innocent people's privacy as you run through the world with your Byakugan scanning each and every person as you can't just check chakra signatures. And if Heroes try to stop you just incapacitate them. Who cares if you just paralyze them or knock them out, even murdering them should be acceptable as they're in your way; the rest of the world can just plunge into chaos for all you care. Don't think about what your mother might think of you after she get's rescued and don't bother with the worthless society that barred you from searching for her either. Yes, just rescue her — if you happened to luckily find her that is since there are NO LEADS TO GO BY — and live out a lonely existence where she may or may not understand where you're actions came from. Mhmm🤔
SucoDeFruta
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Voce não tem criatividade, você e um lixo, seu merda

Vermillion_Yormsky:Ok, what makes more sense: 1) Abide by the laws of society while you train to get the skills to find your mother. Employ the help of others while you train and stick to an already established good moral code. Or 2) Yeet the law into orbit and randomly target villains both big and small in the small hope that perhaps you may run into those that kidnapped your mother. Forget other innocent people's privacy as you run through the world with your Byakugan scanning each and every person as you can't just check chakra signatures. And if Heroes try to stop you just incapacitate them. Who cares if you just paralyze them or knock them out, even murdering them should be acceptable as they're in your way; the rest of the world can just plunge into chaos for all you care. Don't think about what your mother might think of you after she get's rescued and don't bother with the worthless society that barred you from searching for her either. Yes, just rescue her — if you happened to luckily find her that is since there are NO LEADS TO GO BY — and live out a lonely existence where she may or may not understand where you're actions came from. Mhmm🤔
DawnEclipse
DawnEclipseLv6DawnEclipse

Well ITS ok of you want him to be a Hero, but why you put a slave from born into a high school for Hero that needs every single math, silence, even literature test to get inside. Bro he is just a save boy since born that don't have any school experience. All he do is planting their field that they don't own from dawn till maybe nightime. You don't need to put him to a school for controling quirk because you give him "absurd" control there. Hell, he give All Migth a good fight. Put him to learn from hero on field of think its necessary social experience.

Vermillion_Yormsky:Ok, what makes more sense: 1) Abide by the laws of society while you train to get the skills to find your mother. Employ the help of others while you train and stick to an already established good moral code. Or 2) Yeet the law into orbit and randomly target villains both big and small in the small hope that perhaps you may run into those that kidnapped your mother. Forget other innocent people's privacy as you run through the world with your Byakugan scanning each and every person as you can't just check chakra signatures. And if Heroes try to stop you just incapacitate them. Who cares if you just paralyze them or knock them out, even murdering them should be acceptable as they're in your way; the rest of the world can just plunge into chaos for all you care. Don't think about what your mother might think of you after she get's rescued and don't bother with the worthless society that barred you from searching for her either. Yes, just rescue her — if you happened to luckily find her that is since there are NO LEADS TO GO BY — and live out a lonely existence where she may or may not understand where you're actions came from. Mhmm🤔
SySuijin
SySuijinLv6SySuijin

well tell me if your mom get kidnapped, and someone told you to go to school and become a hero to make it legal saving his mom.. I get your mindset that saving your mom is illegal without a license, maybe you should get your license too so that if your mom needs to be saved then you can save her legally. that's a good plot? make sense? hahaha! and tbh you have describe that the MC's power is enough to flip a continent and I fully understand that tragedy tag.. but you forced it too much..

Vermillion_Yormsky:*Sigh,* I guess the very act of doing something to develop the plot, so long as it disturbs the MC is in itself "retarded." "He listens to a stranger," you say? Well, who the **** isn't a stranger to him after he left the country that enslaved him like less a day after the escape. AND HE ACTUALLY LISTENED? Holy Shit! Can you believe that he actually listened?! It's fucking preposterous! Anyone and everyone knows that just because you have supreme strength you automatically know what's for the best. Better yet, the strongest never listened to others, especially not "weak strangers..." You can't erase the flying thunder god seal without being a seal master of the highest order? Fine, I'll give you that... Yeah, no; that only applies in the ninja world, WHICH THE STORY'S NOT WRITTEN IN. This is a fucking superhuman based society with uncountable Quirks of all types. In the manga, there's already been a guy that can disassemble and reassemble anything and everything he touches. Another guy can fucking disintegrate anything his hand touches. The last example I'll give is, A FUCKING LITTLE GIRL THAT CAN REWIND TIME. Could it really be that hard to image a Quirk that could erase a seal? -Written by a salty Vanilla-Boi
Cyberus371
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Well tv shows didn't tell you You need those license to rescue someone And deku didn't need a license when he tried to save kachan (Forgot their names) the students pretty much barge in on the league of villains? Hideout to save kachan(again) soo no need for that **** And since he has a strong power and this obito guy likely has an sharigan Why didn't he just put the county in illusion Like in that one episode of naruto where everyone had different personality

SySuijin:well tell me if your mom get kidnapped, and someone told you to go to school and become a hero to make it legal saving his mom.. I get your mindset that saving your mom is illegal without a license, maybe you should get your license too so that if your mom needs to be saved then you can save her legally. that's a good plot? make sense? hahaha! and tbh you have describe that the MC's power is enough to flip a continent and I fully understand that tragedy tag.. but you forced it too much..
Cyberus371
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Read the Okotsuki? Bloodline as obito well didn't properly read the description and I didn't read this yet

Cyberus371:Well tv shows didn't tell you You need those license to rescue someone And deku didn't need a license when he tried to save kachan (Forgot their names) the students pretty much barge in on the league of villains? Hideout to save kachan(again) soo no need for that **** And since he has a strong power and this obito guy likely has an sharigan Why didn't he just put the county in illusion Like in that one episode of naruto where everyone had different personality