Review Detail of asaade_ragnarokm in The Intelligent Potter

this a script not a novel example scene 1 in the corridor you will talk with hermione and then cut scene 2 you and hermione will be in the library and talk there and cut scene 3 hagrids hut you will with hagrid along with hermione and cut scene 4 already inside the castle you will with hermione about hagrid you are making a facking script not a novel, the flow of the story is nowhere to be found you cut a part of the story and skipped to the next part