Review Detail of FattyBai in Vampire: the Masquerade - Nirvana
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As a fan of the world of Vampire: The Masquerade - Bloodlines and as someone who's gone through multiple runs with most of the clans, it's nice to see someone write their take on it. Would have never thought to make a fan-fic of it. I see you've chosen to make your character a part of the Tremere clan, and have no doubt in my mind that she'll become a fearsome blood mage over the course of the story. A word of caution would be not to make her too powerful (because we all know how broken Tremere abilities can get) and have her rely on the world around her instead, or else you'll have a killing machine on your hands. But that's up to you. You've got the pacing down so no chapter feels boring or unneeded, and you've done a good job of pacing yourself in handing out the lore of the world, making sure not to turn it into a tome (haha) instead of a story about Leona. No major issues with your writing style either, which is a relief on the eyes, too. All around superb work compared to most novels out there, so keep your chin up and keep at it, from one author to another!
Vampire: the Masquerade - Nirvana
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Ahhh I'm thinking about starting a group chat of the WN VtMB fans I've met here XD In my country it's just so niche that I feel like I'm the only one who's played it :( Feels lonely I started writing this fanfic because I love the original game of course but it's sorta too "cult-classic" and thus becomes one niche product, and I feel it's a pity that a beautifully built series fallen undiscovered while other bxllshits wearing a vampire skin are taking up the market, but then I realized that this series is again too "culty" to be appreciated by the general audience, and many parts of it seem not so fit in my "aesthetics", so this is an effort of rewriting it to make it easier to enjoy by the majority. So because of this I guess (and based on the feedback of all reviewers who already played the game) it may not be the best thing for actual game fans to read. Since it's intended for people who don't know about the settings, there's lots of info dumping and at the beginning I didn't plan too many original plots that are different from the game, for you guys it maybe very boring to see the stuff you already know :( But trust me, afterwards it gets better XD and you may probably see I rewrite so many characters, plots and settings. Ah, feels like I've been repeating this to all game fans, guess here the game is much popular than I presume XD I probably should put this disclaimer in the synopsis.
I've always been Tremere boi, but I loved how fun playing as a Malkavian was. Some of the best dialogue options in the game, lol.
Fiona_Singer:Oh and just curious, which clan did you pick? :D
Ahhhh me too XD I sorta feel like I'm more of a Venture+Tremere+Malkavian combined girl so I always hesitate between these three when I create my character. Malks are really interesting to play and I love malk girl's costumes (what can i say im kinky XD), pity that we don't have a special ending that can only be unlocked by malk's special ability of insights.
FattyBai:I've always been Tremere boi, but I loved how fun playing as a Malkavian was. Some of the best dialogue options in the game, lol.