Review Detail of William_Blackstone in A new god ( a marvel fan fic)

As an author and the best storyteller 4 years in a row at primary school. And this story is good but remember byron readers want you to show us not tell us. For example instead of telling us he picked up the artifact you should say that fot example "it felt hollow as it rolled like a ball through my palms my finger tips twitched as they priced the sharp points of the strange object, strange letters glowed, letters that resembled norse letters" try it out please