Review Detail of Pieperson2001 in Anime/Cultivation System

Okay look. I like this story. And I think it can be good. But it is filled with so many flaws. Spelling errors. run on sentences. grammatical errors. normally I don't care if a story has these. hell most webnovels are filled with them, but this one. God. Did you even reread before posting? Also the pacing. Dear God the pacing. It starts at a fast pace and does not slow down. MC dies meets God whines to him. gets what he wants. first chapter over. you think that'd be cool... It isn't. And then later on you have him in the one piece world thrashing a lot of those characters. Now look. I like bs op mcs. And I aware that the mc would be stronger then them since he has some really bs stuff. But... This is to fast. this is 60 chapters in and the mc is already this busted. that isn't fun. it feels cheap. You could have built this up a lot better going about it at a slower pace slowly getting him to that point. or that very least wait off until a few chapters before you make your Gary Stu God. And thats another thing. the power scale sucks. it is worse then dbz. This really does feel like a self insert. this is like a bad fanfic. it's almost funny how bad it is. Now... to be fair. I am reading it. And I'm gonna keep reading it. This man is getting better. Chapters still suck but compared to his first few these look good. All he needs to do is work on his pacing, his grammar, and maybe not try to make busted bs stuff that is boring. I want to give this story a higher rating but I won't because even if I like it, I know its filled with so many flaws.