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2019-08-25 00:53

Like most fictions from beginner authors, too rushed. Too much content and severe lack of details. Feels like you are reading just a summary of the book and the events, instead of the book itself. Zero immersion in the novel because of it. The idea is not bad, quite liked the Konosuba as well.

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