Review Detail of Hua_Li_An in Abluvion

Abluvion is a dystopian fairytale, filled with mystery and human interactions akin to Atsuko Asano's Light Novel, No. 6. From the start, it was gripping and burst with intrigue. Mystery leads the readers onwards, but it is the humanity in such a scientifically-driven world that makes this webnovel shine. In truth, there is room for more improvements, but if polished, it can be a formidable read. On a personal note, I found the ending too rushed, and the middle parts too dragged out. One should place importance in every action and scene so that it keeps the readers interested. Switching to a different character's POV is well, but it should be done in the right times and in the right amounts. There could have been more character building to Rinthe and Darius, in my opinion. <SPOILER> The twist in the ending also seemed contrived, as little hints of it happening were presented before (all I found was of Cana and Magic Users, and they never were explained). In general, I found loopholes as well, but I won't elaborate too much. I believe the author can read through this again and make it better. All in all, great job! Sci-fi of this quality is hard to find in this site, but this could really improve with more practice and polishing. Kudos, and keep writing!