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Your_Daddy1
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Writing Quality isn't great, but it's readable and I was able to follow along. The story is fast-paced and skips over some details/information that I think is needed. I think where this book could probably have the most improvement is the description of the actual baseball games that are taking place. The entire game is just a list of each pitch, who hit what where, and when someone scores. I think if the games were seen through the mc's eyes with his narration of what's happening at the moment, what he sees and hears could make the games much more interesting. This is the spoiler part... I lost interest after Jace healed Theo. The possible relationship of Jace who is a freak athlete and Theo who is stuck to a wheelchair had me excited for the possible dynamic between the two. Then, Theo after not being able to walk his entire life managed to not only make the team but become the starting pitcher after what I think was just a few months. Oh, he can also pitch left-handed after just a bit of training.

altalt

dropped no time to write and no inspiration sorry

sparka

Liked it!

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