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RockNRage
RockNRageLv54yrRockNRage

I have read up to chapter 70 and after seeing only positive reviews I thnk the author needs an honest one. WQuality adn SUpdates is top tier, nothing to say, just some minor mistakes but nothing much. The problem is all the rest: Despite being an original, this is exactly like all the CN novels in the good and the bad way. The MC is a reincarnator, yet he doesn't feel and earthling. He gets used to kill immediately and the fact that he is from earth is meaningless to the story, only justify his cheat ability. He is described in the early chapters like a normal good for nothing that yet becomes a workaholic with an indomitable willl after being reborn, for no apparent reason. The WB is kosher, like any cultivation novel there is the dantian, the sea of consciousness, etc. Minor variation but nothing original. A lot of faceslapping, arrogant young lords, and as in CN the avarage IQ of all chars is around 20. Even a patriarch orders amount to nothing thanks to the low IQ. If you are okay with an original novel that is identical to a CN where the MC just trains and kills and has almost no inner monologue aside those about killing and training, that just feels like a pair of pants for the reader to fit, than this is the novel for you. I dropped this after lily's death. Seriously, she was already 1 dimensional, killing her like that is lazy writing to let the protagonist be unchained. Her love didn't affect the MC in the least, he became a cold blooded killer anyway, I don't get why using her in the novel. Could have died from childbirth and no one would notice the difference, not even the MC

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Birth of the Demonic Sword

Eveofchaos

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Shadow_XYZ
Shadow_XYZLv4Shadow_XYZ

the f4ck, the mc is not even op

RockNRage:I never said it's garbage or utterly bad, just that it's not my cup of tea due to the complete lack of char develop and meaningful secondary characters. If you like OP protagonist, then you will like it
Eveofchaos
EveofchaosAuthorEveofchaos

That is kinda unfair in many aspects. I agree that my novel is similar to CN ones in many aspects but there are some flaws in this review. The MC kills his first human only after being betrayed and I empathized in many chapters that he gave no value to life at all. He becomes a workaholic because he finds his sense of living in power and I wrote many times that too, I actually even made an introspective chapter about it. He basically met with 2 nobles so far and I think it's too early to judge all the category of the antagonists as "Mindless idiots", they are just kids after all. I agree that I could have written many parts in a better way but it feels unfair to be criticized for things that I was particularly careful about.

RockNRage
RockNRageLv5RockNRage

I'm sorry author-nim if it feels unfair but is actually an objective review. Just as in any cultivation CN novel: reincarnator turns homicidal with no backlashes, earth background doesn't matter, constant faceslapping (see when he taks with anyone who disrespects him or broke hands) even from normal guards, the MC has no inner life every arc was train then kill, rinse and repeat. Faceslapping is nice done once in a while, but it happens too much here, like in CN novels. You say he gives no value to life, ok, but why? he is from earth, why his values are so corrupted? so far no explanation is given he seems just to have become a sociopath for no reason. Sorry, but going from a lazy bum to workaholic like that sounds again like lazy writing. You just flip his old persona upside down for plot reason. The introspective chapter was shallow, he basically stated the omnipresent CN novel concept that might makes right, that being weak is a sin etc. it's not original, just a convenient trope abused everywhere. All antagonists ARE idiots, no one ever questions why a kid goes on mission despite the young age and the bullying+faceslapping ensues. I'm sorry if i sound harsh but your novel really hooked me at first, then turned into a CN one.

Eveofchaos:That is kinda unfair in many aspects. I agree that my novel is similar to CN ones in many aspects but there are some flaws in this review. The MC kills his first human only after being betrayed and I empathized in many chapters that he gave no value to life at all. He becomes a workaholic because he finds his sense of living in power and I wrote many times that too, I actually even made an introspective chapter about it. He basically met with 2 nobles so far and I think it's too early to judge all the category of the antagonists as "Mindless idiots", they are just kids after all. I agree that I could have written many parts in a better way but it feels unfair to be criticized for things that I was particularly careful about.
Eveofchaos
EveofchaosAuthorEveofchaos

I mean, you set a personality and then you work on that. I agree that I could have explained more but that would have just bored more readers that actually entice them. As for the CN repetitions, those are simply a question of tastes: like every shounen manga feels the same so might feel novels of the same genre. Anyhow, I thank you for your honest review, it will surely help me grow as a writer and I even think that your vote is fair. I just wanted to point out some things that I thought were misinterpreted.

Trek
TrekLv6Trek

Dont listen to this guy, in a dog eat dog, ruthless world you either adapt or die. And mc adapted.

Eveofchaos:I mean, you set a personality and then you work on that. I agree that I could have explained more but that would have just bored more readers that actually entice them. As for the CN repetitions, those are simply a question of tastes: like every shounen manga feels the same so might feel novels of the same genre. Anyhow, I thank you for your honest review, it will surely help me grow as a writer and I even think that your vote is fair. I just wanted to point out some things that I thought were misinterpreted.
TypeD
TypeDLv5TypeD

I think, this a good novel

RockNRage
RockNRageLv5RockNRage

I think it's good too, but i see too much wasted potential. Up until i read it the pacing was too fast, all the chars but MC and master were 1D. MC was supposed to love his mother yet accepted her death like nothing had happened.

TypeD:I think, this a good novel
Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6Hentai_Senchou

In this kind of world, you adapt by getting stronger, it doesn't matter how ruthless you are if you're weak. "Adapt or die" is a bull**** excuse since if your strong enough to kill everyone, you're strong enough to not get killed by them. Before you say, "they will go after people close to him." He doesn't have emotions or any close ones anymore, so that's no excuse

Trek:Dont listen to this guy, in a dog eat dog, ruthless world you either adapt or die. And mc adapted.
Trek
TrekLv6Trek

Ahahahahahaah, ya right, if you see a weaker cultivator with a treasure you need in a ruin you have to be ruthless enough yo kill them and take that resources so that you can get stronger. If you didn't adapt and remained with earth morals you would be doomed.

Hentai_Senchou:In this kind of world, you adapt by getting stronger, it doesn't matter how ruthless you are if you're weak. "Adapt or die" is a bull**** excuse since if your strong enough to kill everyone, you're strong enough to not get killed by them. Before you say, "they will go after people close to him." He doesn't have emotions or any close ones anymore, so that's no excuse
Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6Hentai_Senchou

You don't have to kill them if they're weaker than you. You could easily just take it from them. Even if it's a divine herb, will anyone hunt you down after it's been eaten?

Trek:Ahahahahahaah, ya right, if you see a weaker cultivator with a treasure you need in a ruin you have to be ruthless enough yo kill them and take that resources so that you can get stronger. If you didn't adapt and remained with earth morals you would be doomed.
I_love_magic
I_love_magicLv10I_love_magic

Hey, i would really like to know if your novel will have any kingdom building or anything being used from Earth? I mean, he can become a powerful cultivator for sure and NO PROBLEM with that, but i find it really REALLY stupid when a character from earth just "abandons" his knowledge and does not care......... so many things he could do, even as he is becoming stronger he should become smarter too......so he could easily experiment and recreate things, even with "magic"! That would be super cool.......as i find these novels increasingly more boring when the MC only, i repeat ONLY lives for his cultivation...and for himself.....because i find the whole thing and the aftermath SO boring! What will he do when he is all omnipotent and ****, live with his 3 million harem members forever with an IQ worthy of a chicken??!! I have not read your story so far, but i always hope a good cultivation one will find me or i it, where not just stupid "power" struggles and face slapping matters. Because as you said he will live for power, but he can rule over people etc.......that is a kind of power too! So could you tell me pls if he will do that OR just become another emotionless slaughtering machine? And if there is a chance he will have other "normal" and "human" activities/hobbies too??

Eveofchaos:That is kinda unfair in many aspects. I agree that my novel is similar to CN ones in many aspects but there are some flaws in this review. The MC kills his first human only after being betrayed and I empathized in many chapters that he gave no value to life at all. He becomes a workaholic because he finds his sense of living in power and I wrote many times that too, I actually even made an introspective chapter about it. He basically met with 2 nobles so far and I think it's too early to judge all the category of the antagonists as "Mindless idiots", they are just kids after all. I agree that I could have written many parts in a better way but it feels unfair to be criticized for things that I was particularly careful about.
RockNRage
RockNRageLv5RockNRage

yeah, my gripe with the story is that a slacker became a workaholic for no reason, developed an undomitable will and killed a man without any psychological consequnce. imo is too much forced for someone that lived on erath in present times and with no relevant background

Hentai_Senchou:In this kind of world, you adapt by getting stronger, it doesn't matter how ruthless you are if you're weak. "Adapt or die" is a bull**** excuse since if your strong enough to kill everyone, you're strong enough to not get killed by them. Before you say, "they will go after people close to him." He doesn't have emotions or any close ones anymore, so that's no excuse
Trek
TrekLv6Trek

They will call their seniors, who will call their elders who will call their sects down on your head. Haven't you read any cultivation books? Leaving behind seeds of trouble is never good, you have to eliminate them from the root.

Hentai_Senchou:You don't have to kill them if they're weaker than you. You could easily just take it from them. Even if it's a divine herb, will anyone hunt you down after it's been eaten?
Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6Hentai_Senchou

No, killing them will call the sects down on your head smartas$. "Boohoo! Sect master, in the ruin that man took my herb from me and ate it in front of me! Please send the sect guardians after him!" Do you really think they would send someone over suck a tiny slight? No, it's always 'beat them black and blue in the city their sect runs, then be surprised when they come to reclaim their prestige.' Beating the dog and it's owner always showing up is a troupe only used by authors that don't know how to write original conflict. Only retards would send people to hunt down someone younger and stronger than the next sect head that got his as$ kicked. Even if they look into that persons background, there are too many hidden clans to be sure about such things

Trek:They will call their seniors, who will call their elders who will call their sects down on your head. Haven't you read any cultivation books? Leaving behind seeds of trouble is never good, you have to eliminate them from the root.
Trek
TrekLv6Trek

You kidding me? Have you read no cultivation books? when have young masters been known for their kindness, even for the slightest offense they will call their fucking grandfathers who will say "you should not have offended my grandson kid!" and then they will kill you. You beat up a goon and rob him, he will get his young master makng up lies about you to entice him, you beat up the young matster his big bro will show up, you beat him up, his elder will show up, beat up the elder the sect master will show up, beat up the sect master the main sect master will show up, beat him and the fucking verable anssters will show up. Why bother, just kill and make sure there is no evidence that leads to you. People in cultivation are never reasonable and they always care about face too much, they would kill you for the slightest offense much less you beating up their kid or goon and robbing him.

Hentai_Senchou:No, killing them will call the sects down on your head smartas$. "Boohoo! Sect master, in the ruin that man took my herb from me and ate it in front of me! Please send the sect guardians after him!" Do you really think they would send someone over suck a tiny slight? No, it's always 'beat them black and blue in the city their sect runs, then be surprised when they come to reclaim their prestige.' Beating the dog and it's owner always showing up is a troupe only used by authors that don't know how to write original conflict. Only retards would send people to hunt down someone younger and stronger than the next sect head that got his as$ kicked. Even if they look into that persons background, there are too many hidden clans to be sure about such things
RockNRage
RockNRageLv5RockNRage

you are right, but nirvanic sun is just saying that it's a clichè used by authors that don't know how to write an original story. I agree with him.

Trek:You kidding me? Have you read no cultivation books? when have young masters been known for their kindness, even for the slightest offense they will call their fucking grandfathers who will say "you should not have offended my grandson kid!" and then they will kill you. You beat up a goon and rob him, he will get his young master makng up lies about you to entice him, you beat up the young matster his big bro will show up, you beat him up, his elder will show up, beat up the elder the sect master will show up, beat up the sect master the main sect master will show up, beat him and the fucking verable anssters will show up. Why bother, just kill and make sure there is no evidence that leads to you. People in cultivation are never reasonable and they always care about face too much, they would kill you for the slightest offense much less you beating up their kid or goon and robbing him.
Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6Hentai_Senchou

The thing about 'the master showing up after you kick his dog' is that it only happens in the books with completely 1 dimensional characters. Like I said, only a retard would send people to kill the person younger and stronger than the sects greatest genius. 'Oh, your investigations have shown that he's just some punk from a rural village that suddenly became a cultivation genius? No trouble will come from killing him then, theres no way he found a really strong master, right?' Like I said multiple times before,only novels written by authors that can't come up with better conflicts than 'You bumped into me‽ kneel down, apologize, slap yourself three times and cripple your cultivation, then I will let you live' have the entire sect line up to get slapped by the protagonist. Those are bad novels and you should feel bad for trying to use them to describe good novels

Trek:You kidding me? Have you read no cultivation books? when have young masters been known for their kindness, even for the slightest offense they will call their fucking grandfathers who will say "you should not have offended my grandson kid!" and then they will kill you. You beat up a goon and rob him, he will get his young master makng up lies about you to entice him, you beat up the young matster his big bro will show up, you beat him up, his elder will show up, beat up the elder the sect master will show up, beat up the sect master the main sect master will show up, beat him and the fucking verable anssters will show up. Why bother, just kill and make sure there is no evidence that leads to you. People in cultivation are never reasonable and they always care about face too much, they would kill you for the slightest offense much less you beating up their kid or goon and robbing him.
RockNRage
RockNRageLv5RockNRage

agreed. I agree so bad.

Hentai_Senchou:The thing about 'the master showing up after you kick his dog' is that it only happens in the books with completely 1 dimensional characters. Like I said, only a retard would send people to kill the person younger and stronger than the sects greatest genius. 'Oh, your investigations have shown that he's just some punk from a rural village that suddenly became a cultivation genius? No trouble will come from killing him then, theres no way he found a really strong master, right?' Like I said multiple times before,only novels written by authors that can't come up with better conflicts than 'You bumped into me‽ kneel down, apologize, slap yourself three times and cripple your cultivation, then I will let you live' have the entire sect line up to get slapped by the protagonist. Those are bad novels and you should feel bad for trying to use them to describe good novels
Ambargo
AmbargoLv13Ambargo

"He gives no value to life at all" doesn't mean he wouldn't be effected. He murdered even if he doesn't give a s*it others life. Most of the authors fail here at the first kill normal people would have nightmares for weeks if not months. And after that they would be reluctant. To become serial killer like mc hey you need large very very large balls. Even if you make mc unique on his own way tell us why he is so unique he can get used to killing immediately. Some authors makes Mcs straight out assassins and it is a cheap way out of the situation but it works. If people has noting to read it is easy to ignore tho.

Eveofchaos:That is kinda unfair in many aspects. I agree that my novel is similar to CN ones in many aspects but there are some flaws in this review. The MC kills his first human only after being betrayed and I empathized in many chapters that he gave no value to life at all. He becomes a workaholic because he finds his sense of living in power and I wrote many times that too, I actually even made an introspective chapter about it. He basically met with 2 nobles so far and I think it's too early to judge all the category of the antagonists as "Mindless idiots", they are just kids after all. I agree that I could have written many parts in a better way but it feels unfair to be criticized for things that I was particularly careful about.
Sabertooth77
Sabertooth77Lv5Sabertooth77

You have to remember most cultivation novels have a trope of strongest gets to decide. Also the stronger you are the more resources you get and the faster you get stronger . Rinse and repeat. If you saw a kid from some poor village suddenly becoming strong the first thing you would think of would be a treasure or inheritance as if he had a strong master he would have been seen or would have taken the poor kid back to his base. A strong man wouldnt stay in a poor home.

Hentai_Senchou:The thing about 'the master showing up after you kick his dog' is that it only happens in the books with completely 1 dimensional characters. Like I said, only a retard would send people to kill the person younger and stronger than the sects greatest genius. 'Oh, your investigations have shown that he's just some punk from a rural village that suddenly became a cultivation genius? No trouble will come from killing him then, theres no way he found a really strong master, right?' Like I said multiple times before,only novels written by authors that can't come up with better conflicts than 'You bumped into me‽ kneel down, apologize, slap yourself three times and cripple your cultivation, then I will let you live' have the entire sect line up to get slapped by the protagonist. Those are bad novels and you should feel bad for trying to use them to describe good novels
Earthshaker34
Earthshaker34Lv6Earthshaker34

They have a treasure and have galls to flaunt it. Where did he get the treasure from? Does he have a master who dotes on him? Father? Sister? Mother? Brother? You don't silence him, he will.

Hentai_Senchou:You don't have to kill them if they're weaker than you. You could easily just take it from them. Even if it's a divine herb, will anyone hunt you down after it's been eaten?