Grammar is alright, stability is good, story development is good, character design is lacking, world background is alright. Character design is the only thing you really need to work on, describe your character early on in the fic, even if they're a known character. Keep mentioning physical traits of the charater as the story progresses. Even something simple like, 'I ran my hair through my blue hair' It's good, not very descriptive but good. Script-style writing doesn't lend itself to descriptions, so that's fine. I would hope to see some descriptions in your future works. Ex: "Goddammit, script is for plays and movies!" The reviewer shook his fist angrily, cursing the author with all the anger he could muster. "You monster! I need something other than dialogue to get lost in the story!" Feeling unsatisfied, the reviewer shook his head and dived headfirst into a wood chipper, scaring a family of five forever and painting the surroundings red.
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Oooo a genuine review, firstly thanks for going out of your way to make one. I plan to edit my earlier chapters to address the physical characteristics of the characters and other mistakes I've made, but Uni has been a pain lately, so once I got ahead of my assignments I'll begin editing them to include physical details and stuff. As for my writing style, I feel like it's too late to change it now unless I change all 43 chapters I have currently released. that's gonna take a lot of time so I won't bother and would rather upload a new chapter since I took that 6 month break. However, I do plan to make a reboot of this fic once I finish it since I didn't like how I rushed the beginning and stuff. in that version I'm hoping to make it semi-ln worthy lol Thanks for the review and I'll try getting to work on it soon! p.s: I'll also be making a character description chapter too. that should help out a little.
Keep writing and never stop, don’t redo your work. Your probably better off continuing as is, with the knowledge you have now. Try something different in the future, but keep fleshing out this fic as you were. In the end it’s up to you, rewriteing is so time consuming, I wouldn’t recommend it. I hope to see more from you in the future.
oh, i meant rewriting when I'm finished with the fanfic. that's about 600 chapter in the future lol so we still got time till then. and no worries, I won't quit writing just yet. I got too many fanfics and stories I wanna make lol
