Review Detail of SangN123 in Chef System - My Second Life!
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The story has a good path thats has many optional path it could go! Seems like MC going to be doing some early gains in his child hood and I wish to see his age progression gradually over chapters onward... but to many reader that would get tedious for them so if Author could do 1-1# to the beginning! Some highlight reel of family moments and parental shenanigans!
Chef System - My Second Life!
Tuque
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Thanks for taking the time to review my novel! I am a munchkin at heart; I write my characters the same way. He will use his free time wisely and try to milk everything he can and gain as much as possible. I am still unsure about time skips; I planned to write many chapters for the childhood arc. I like to explain in-depth what’s going on. I don’t want to skim out on details. I hope the pacing doesn’t feel slow. I might have to do time skips, depending on the reader retention. I plan to do multiple highlight reel of family moments and parental shenanigans via interlude / side-story / etc. I enjoy writing them.
I think the pacing is pretty good so far I haven't found any chapters that are boring. I do like the parents POV a lot so far its really amusing to read about their thoughts and its really fleshing out the parents character. But maybe like others have been saying dont have the moms pov back to back with the dad's? It kind of feels redundant idk.
Tuque:Thanks for taking the time to review my novel! I am a munchkin at heart; I write my characters the same way. He will use his free time wisely and try to milk everything he can and gain as much as possible. I am still unsure about time skips; I planned to write many chapters for the childhood arc. I like to explain in-depth what’s going on. I don’t want to skim out on details. I hope the pacing doesn’t feel slow. I might have to do time skips, depending on the reader retention. I plan to do multiple highlight reel of family moments and parental shenanigans via interlude / side-story / etc. I enjoy writing them.
Thank you for your opinion, I appreciate it! After some reading comments for both sets of POV, I do agree it does feel redundant. I plan to not make the same mistake in the future regarding the POV. I will have different POV once more character get introduced. Maybe space them out better as well. I just need to get around to writing more! Work has been keeping be busy and I been procrastinating.
non_refert:I think the pacing is pretty good so far I haven't found any chapters that are boring. I do like the parents POV a lot so far its really amusing to read about their thoughts and its really fleshing out the parents character. But maybe like others have been saying dont have the moms pov back to back with the dad's? It kind of feels redundant idk.
Hey no problem real life and health comes first and good luck with writing hope you continue for a while haha
Tuque:Thank you for your opinion, I appreciate it! After some reading comments for both sets of POV, I do agree it does feel redundant. I plan to not make the same mistake in the future regarding the POV. I will have different POV once more character get introduced. Maybe space them out better as well. I just need to get around to writing more! Work has been keeping be busy and I been procrastinating.
