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Veno123
Veno123Lv44yr
2020-05-26 05:33

love it so far, is author ok? seema like he havent touched webnovel for 10+ months...... hope author is ok and will post more chapters......

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Xiao0011100
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Ada banyak kesalahan yang dibuat penulis dalam fan fic ini. Banyak plot yang diatur dengan buruk. Banyak hal hal sederhana yang dijadikan rumit. Banyak hal hal rumit menjadi terlalu sederhana. Jadi walaupun fan fic ini baru sekitar 8 bab, tapi plot dalam fan fic ini sangat buruk karena saya tidak mengerti apakah Mc memainkan vrmmo dengan cheat untuk mencari uang agar bisa hidup nyaman padahal sistem bisa meretas seluruh dunia dengan sangat sederhana, jika Mc butuh uang sistem bisa mendapatkan uang untuk Mc dengan mudah, jika Mc butuh bahan kultivasi sistem bisa membantu Mc mendapatkan itu dengan berbagai metode. Mungkin pembaca lain berpikir itu terlalu sederhana dan sistem terlalu Op. Tapi memang begitulah faktanya, sistem memberikan dukungan penuh terhadap Mc tanpa biaya sedikitpun, itu merusak akal sehat dimana segala hal didunia ini memiliki harga. Bahkan tindakan sederhana seperti bernafas memiliki harga untuk itu, yaitu setiap nafas yang dilakukan manusia maka umur mereka berkurang sedikit demi sedikit sampai manusia ahirnya berhenti bernafas ketika umur mereka telah habis. Untuk fan fic sage of darkness jauh lebih baik daripada fan fic ini. Walaupun Mc sangat Op, tapi itu tidak merusak akal sehat seperti fan fic ini. Bahkan Mc sage of darkness membutuhkan banyak sumber daya untuk memodifikasi skill maupun membuat skill baru. Dan bukan hanya sumberdaya yang dibutuhkan Mc sage of darkness, tapi juga waktu untuk membuat atau memodifikasi skill juga sangat lama. Berbeda dengan fan fic ini dimana Mc mendapat apapun tanpa membayar harga dengan benar. Saya sangat bingung bagaimana penulis yang sama memiliki novel yang sangat berbeda. Jika penulis ingin menggunakan strategi membuat novel buruk untuk mendapat kesan bahwa novel lainya menjadi lebih bagus maka saya sangat kecewa terhadap penulis.

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