Review Detail of OwariDa in Christa Scarletblood: Unetched History

Hello, everyone. I am the author of Christa Scarletblood: Unetched History. I noticed that even after finishing the story, there are still people reading it. So I thought maybe you can also read the new story I'm writing. Here's the link to my new story: https://***.google.com/amp/s/m.webnovel.com/amp/book/18567003306321805 I made a lot of errors, especially with writing, when I was writing Christa Scarletblood. I'm afraid I might still do the same in my new story. So if you think I made even just a tiniest error, feel free to leave a comment or review about it so I can avoid doing it again and again. Thank you very much!