Item: 'The One Punch Girl' In Nine Deadly Realms
Rating: 2.6

kkiyumnoLv35yr

2019-06-28 05:11

I saw the author comment on many novels to check out his novel, so I did. The grammar made the novel so hard to read that I could barely understand anything. Also, the idea of combining multiple different animes and stories doesn’t sit well with me. The contest is not fan fiction. Many supporters say that the grammar mistakes are a unique ‘style’, but I think they’re just mistakes. I would suggest proofreading your chapters more, checking grammar, and ensuring that it’s easier to understand what’s happening and more detail.

'The One Punch Girl' In Nine Deadly Realms

squirtle_sqaud_z

4.3

16 Chs

Liked by 5 people

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

Did you find the latest chaps grammer mistakes less

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

the latest two new chaps were better than before I think

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

the latest two new chaps were better than before I think

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kkiyumnoLv3

Yes, the last two chapters were much better than the beginning chapters. There is still a few mistakes though, and the writing style is not my favorite.

squirtle_sqaud_z: the latest two new chaps were better than before I think

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

Thank you for your kind comment

kkiyumno:Yes, the last two chapters were much better than the beginning chapters. There is still a few mistakes though, and the writing style is not my favorite.

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

What about story

kkiyumno:Yes, the last two chapters were much better than the beginning chapters. There is still a few mistakes though, and the writing style is not my favorite.

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

What about story

kkiyumno:Yes, the last two chapters were much better than the beginning chapters. There is still a few mistakes though, and the writing style is not my favorite.

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

If you do not like it you may read my another novel game of Destruction

kkiyumno:Yes, the last two chapters were much better than the beginning chapters. There is still a few mistakes though, and the writing style is not my favorite.

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

Also uploaded 2 new chaps 2day to increase update stability reply if you liked em

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

Also uploaded 2 new chaps 2day to increase update stability reply if you liked em

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

Try my another novel then game of Destruction

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CindersenLv4

Whoa. How did this get so many votes when the story is inspired by One Punch Man and this isn't a fan fiction inspired contest? Not to mention, it has poor writing with frequent lack of proper capitalization, punctuation, and overall correct sentence structure. The mistakes are so blatantly obvious that it makes me wonder if the reviewers who gave this such high ratings are in elementary school or something. My advice would be to use Grammarly or learn how to write better basic English because this grammar is pretty bad and detracts from any semblance of a story. I would have given you a one, but you tried, so two for effort. I hope you take my advice seriously in order to improve your story and writing.

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Lazy_PrinceLv6

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Legio9Lv10

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AuroraAzureLv4

Umm.. I'm only here because the author commented to me on IRAS randomly to check out their novel. It was out of the blue since it was off of a balloon gift comment of mine, but I was curious and checked it out anyway. But the writing is just okay for me? I'm not into anime and I can't follow the story well because I think the formatting got messed up? Oh well you told me to check it out so I did. Good luck with your story I suppose? 😅 Sorry I can't give more feedback because I can't follow the story that well, and it's only 4 chapters long...... Guerilla advertising on translated novels is probably not a good idea haha. I was surprised by the reply. 😆

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julisLv3

Sorry but I expected better from a story voted third in the contest. Writing mistakes are all over the place. It doesn't even look like it's being seriously written because sentences are cut off before the end and appear on another paragraph. Grammar is completely off. That just shows lack of care for properly typing and reviewing your work before uploading. There are other stories which at least proofread their work better than this. The story is also based off one punch man, so it's not really original like the other stories too. This is just my honest opinion. If I were to give you a real score on what this story deserves, it would be a 1-2 star max, no offense. Keep writing and studying proper English to get better. But I have a feeling that once this contest is over, you're just going to drop this story like many others who just join the contest for the SS prize. But I hope you do continue so that you can get better.

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RedNightLv4

I am giving you four to encourage you, and this rating in no way reflects on the story itself. If you want me to give you a honest rating, it would be one, and this one rating is due to your desire to write. Write more, learn more, from a fellow author who started at the bottom just like you.

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Kalindi_Dalvi_8389Lv2

Amazing writting quality almost no spelling mistakes Stability of updating is also good enough for 5 stars And story development is better than first chapter and The mc's development was very nice. And world background was awesome👏✊👍👏✊👍 pretty awesome book.

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squirtle_sqaud_zAuthor

The one punch girl series is best and her immense power is very important and also she is female lead so The one punch girl series is best and her immense power is very important and also she is female lead so

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