Review Detail of MyCharacterLeads in The Arks

This novel opened up a whole new world. I like the way the plot was made. 👍 Writing quality - I don't have any doubt about choice of words, but I thought no some of the sentences need revision. (I need to reread some paragraph in order to understand them.) And I suggest to chop cramped paragraph. It was just hard to read and it will cause some readers to just skim all over it. (Suggestion: If the thoughts aren't connected to the first paragraph, cut it out and put it in another paragraph.) Character and story development - I don't have a thing to say. They we're just so cute to imagine. But the character development was affected by the fast pace of the plot development. It might be more convincing if you 'show' us not 'tell'. Just like the part where Mavs and the time boy create chaos. You have just tell us that they started one but you didn't show us how they did it. World Background - Unique! I love how the author integrated fictional character of the others celestial beings. Hope this will help.😉😉 Keep it up Author! 👍👍