Review Detail of shin_rae_miu in *Hiatus/Dropped/Writer's Block* Naruto - A Cursed System

it would be good if you forget about the fact that he had a shattered mind skill that should have have affected his psyche and personality. otherwise he is an utter #**# in this story that you made amazingly. oh and him liking a centipede and calling it cute then saying I will kill you to the said centipede does not seem to be enough to justify his shattered mind skill. he is needlessly childish like bruh tone it down. and do not make him TOO MUCH enthusiastic about meeting plot characters like come on bruh currently he is way too much of a a$$kisser. with all that said and done your fic is good but it could be WAY better if you pay attention to your oc's pros and cons, how much attention he will get, his first impressions, and how will he deal with butterfly effect.