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SaturnSpring
SaturnSpringLv14yr
2020-08-28 17:25

Learning about the Indian culture from a narrative story is trully fascinating. Since in the first place, world history thoroughly sparks my interest... and somewhat I could relate myself with the MC because of that. The world background is overwhelming and the story is well-written. I don't see that much mistakes. But since it's supposed to be a novel, it would be better not to dump manifold informations about the said memoir and instead, insert them in various chapters as it goes on. It will really thrill readers to binge more. Although, I didn't seem to have any problem of all those since I usually spend amount of my time reading historical related books... which was way hard to understand than any of the works I read like yours. I will read more of this story and put my heart into it. Thanks for the daily usage! I'll support this book no matter what.

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RenuKakkar
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Thank you. I had removed a lot of information from the first few chapters and shifted it to later ones. Maybe the first chapter needed to be amended more.

SaturnSpring
SaturnSpringLv1

I think it's okay. You can turn down a little information since those details from the first chapter are relevant for the story. But it would be great to soften the pace through and add more immersion for the MC for all of that. Well, that's my thoughts. But still, the story was so damn interesting and thoughtfully unique. It's a great piece indeed.

RenuKakkar:Thank you. I had removed a lot of information from the first few chapters and shifted it to later ones. Maybe the first chapter needed to be amended more.
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As far as immersion goes, full marks from me. It is not the type of story that I would generally be interested in reading (at least not yet) but I find myself genuinely interested in the story. Writing Quality - 5/5 It has set up a great atmosphere for the story where the world seems surreal and a bit uneven. This makes the attention to detail by the author extenuate on the realistic part of it while the thing with dreams builds up the semi-realistic-semi-fantasia part of it. Therefore, even if it's not done directly, I feel like the world-building so far is the most impressive aspect of the story. World Background - 5/5 That said though, it's not like other aspects aren't good. The protagonist, Tania, is explained well and her family members, while we haven't seen much of them, act like real people do, which does add a lot to them. This sets up a great base for further character development. Character Design - 5/5 As far as the story development goes, well, we only have 6 chapters so far and it's good. I don't have any problems with it. I need to read more chapters before actually forming an opinion on it tbh. Story Development - 5/5 I don't know if there's an update schedule or not but it seems like the updates have been uneven. Regardless, I don't want to give you less stars because of something like this. Stability of Updates - 5/5 And there you have it. I am rating this book as high as I can because I enjoyed every aspect of it and have become genuinely interested in reading more. Great work, author! Keep it up!

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