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ZephyrIsMe
ZephyrIsMeLv114yr
2020-03-04 13:13

I am no really good at advising about grammar and the like as I am also not good at it. But I found there are some typos in your novel and wrong use of an article like for example, an year, should be 'a year'. Also, it is my opinion but there is too much information about Max Muller that has not many impacts on your story. Hope this is helping you in making you a better writer. Ps: Please don't take my review as negative and take it to your heart. Your novel is only three chapters and it can develop more.

Born Again

RenuKakkar
4.7
74 Chs

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RenuKakkar
RenuKakkarAuthor

Thank you. Yes I will review the typographical errors. As regards Max Muller, maybe I can shorten the reference.

4yr
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Hi everyone. I am shamelessly promoting my novel. This time I am writing a small novel. It is about a girl of mixed race (Indian father and Russian mother) who comes to India to meet her grandparents. She also wants to know why she has recurring dreams about certain temples and forts. It is something neither the doctors in Russia nor the doctors in India are able to help her with. Please support with your comments and suggestions and ratings etc.

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Interesting Book. Well done Author The novel has a good plot and is promising. I love the pacing of the novel and the way writer writes the story. The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . The plot development is awesome , can't wait for the upcoming chapters. And hope that the writer will continue this awesome work and will evolve even more with time . Mine best wishes are always with you .[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Vey interesting story, the character and world building development is great, the writing quality is great just have a little typos but other than that it's great. Great novel give it a try you'll love it.

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SaturnSpring
SaturnSpringLv1

Learning about the Indian culture from a narrative story is trully fascinating. Since in the first place, world history thoroughly sparks my interest... and somewhat I could relate myself with the MC because of that. The world background is overwhelming and the story is well-written. I don't see that much mistakes. But since it's supposed to be a novel, it would be better not to dump manifold informations about the said memoir and instead, insert them in various chapters as it goes on. It will really thrill readers to binge more. Although, I didn't seem to have any problem of all those since I usually spend amount of my time reading historical related books... which was way hard to understand than any of the works I read like yours. I will read more of this story and put my heart into it. Thanks for the daily usage! I'll support this book no matter what.

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Jenjibread
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To be quite honest, this story initially read a lot more like a comprehensive Wiki to me. I personally never knew that much about the histories and cultures, and I enjoyed how you commented on which facts were true and which were not. However, I think the issue I had was more of with the integration of the facts into the story itself in the first few chapters. Since I am a fan of history, and I really enjoyed the efforts you put into worldbuilding, I had actually read past a few more chapters and found the dialogue and plotline to be much better later on. I think it was a bit wary in the beginning for me personally though since the information all seemed to come at me at once. Overall, great job!

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Nightmare_weaver
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Love the synopsis. Very unique, I haven't seen anything like it before. I will definitely be reading this like a mad man. Keep up the great work and carry on.

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prada_murthy
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Although this is not the kind of book that I usually read, I must say it is written in an interesting way. The historical aspects have been incorporated quite well, though I feel it was a little too much some times. Tania having dreams of her past self is quite captivating. Look forward to how she is going to find out everything. Keep up the good work author.

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Ramen_H
Ramen_HLv15

Hmm... I really don't know what to say about the novel since until now it has been mostly setup, and rightfully so since it is quite well written. The is a lot of information in this novel, I honestly felt like I learned a lot. Overall I don't have much to comment about since the story is still in its start and buildup, there are some paragraphs that get repeated a lot at the start, but I have not found anything of fault in the later chapter. Excellent worldbuilding and character creation though, and I feel that the informative aspect of the novel will take it a long way in the future.

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Zyanide100
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As far as immersion goes, full marks from me. It is not the type of story that I would generally be interested in reading (at least not yet) but I find myself genuinely interested in the story. Writing Quality - 5/5 It has set up a great atmosphere for the story where the world seems surreal and a bit uneven. This makes the attention to detail by the author extenuate on the realistic part of it while the thing with dreams builds up the semi-realistic-semi-fantasia part of it. Therefore, even if it's not done directly, I feel like the world-building so far is the most impressive aspect of the story. World Background - 5/5 That said though, it's not like other aspects aren't good. The protagonist, Tania, is explained well and her family members, while we haven't seen much of them, act like real people do, which does add a lot to them. This sets up a great base for further character development. Character Design - 5/5 As far as the story development goes, well, we only have 6 chapters so far and it's good. I don't have any problems with it. I need to read more chapters before actually forming an opinion on it tbh. Story Development - 5/5 I don't know if there's an update schedule or not but it seems like the updates have been uneven. Regardless, I don't want to give you less stars because of something like this. Stability of Updates - 5/5 And there you have it. I am rating this book as high as I can because I enjoyed every aspect of it and have become genuinely interested in reading more. Great work, author! Keep it up!

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hye4654
hye4654Lv10

The world of the story is carefully built with lots of research being done to make it seem semi-realistic. This shows the creativity and originality shown from the beginning of the story. This novel will be great for someone who is looking for a fantasy world-building story with elements containing chances to learn about religion and other cultures.

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