Review Detail of swarm in THE GREAT DRAGON

Structural Improvements, it takes baby steps to reach big steps. Work on capitalizing your sentences, ie, dialogue. "He stood, staring into the empty room known as the abyss room. He wondered if he could ever see the light of day after being trapped here for a century." That's a example I came up with in less than a minute, theres some mistakes but its generally what you want to aim for in your next chapters. Description and details need to also be improved upon.