Review Detail of Tucker100000 in END Initiated...

The story started great, had a good prologue and a nice childhood. The time skip really messed up the story and seemed forced. What happened during the time skip seems skipped and there seems no real progress from the beginning of the time skip and the end. The chakra system seems vague at best and has to real structure. The author seems to just add thing to make it work or interesting. Also although the main character is supposed to be really smart, when the father dies (at least that is what showed) he ignores that saying that it was a “dream”. Even when his aunt suggests that something happened to his daughter he blatantly ignored what his aunt said, like it never happened. I get that people can force them self’s to not think about the matter, but in their subconscious they remember it. As a 200 year old person (mentality) (don’t quite me on that) he should have realized that. ALSO that he has pasted the gate which were different mental challenges that should have made the previous sentences negligent. In conclusion, the novel seems forced and vague. I believe to improve this novel the author should rewrite a lot of what I said and what other people have said. This is a bit of flaming but it is supposed to be constructive criticism. 3.5 stars for me.