I'm not against it but I don't know why the boys were mixed in this adventure-log. It just felt weird. Sorry if I offended. If you just write it normally it will be better, somehow, it's hard to imagine...even though it can happen. Please try to edit it, it will get better... Otsukare
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Its okay dear. Firstly thank you for reading my story. I already did most of them. i did scuba, sky diving, rafting, monster bike riding, and I even visit that haunted place too without permission. basically this story is my experience. When I learn about this contest, I dont had any time to prepare any other story. so I come up with my story. It may be imaginary for you and others. Sorry for i didnt fit well in your perspective. If you tell me where i need to fix, i will consider your opinion first.
Rather than fix, it just depends on perspectives I guess. It is a good story otherwise but when the boys enters the plot, somehow, for me, it felt forced. I'm not too sure of this myself, I just thought it would have been better if you wrote it with a simple MC rather than the boys. I know I'm not explaining myself well, again sorry if I offended you. Still, otsukaresan.
tejal_korhalkar:Its okay dear. Firstly thank you for reading my story. I already did most of them. i did scuba, sky diving, rafting, monster bike riding, and I even visit that haunted place too without permission. basically this story is my experience. When I learn about this contest, I dont had any time to prepare any other story. so I come up with my story. It may be imaginary for you and others. Sorry for i didnt fit well in your perspective. If you tell me where i need to fix, i will consider your opinion first.
