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2019-09-29 00:51

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I'm pnot sure where to start, for I found everything I read to be problematic. the writing quality felt devastatingly unprofessional, even for a webnovel, using contractions where they were not appropriate, deviating from the plot at hand in little inserts (bts meet for example), and including emojis to tag along character interactions. plot-wise, the storytelling of the plot felt rushed and, as another user pointed out, over before it even began. this whole ordeal with taking down bliss, coming back together with Daniel, finding her father's killer, etc. was a mess and could barely be followed along due to how rushed it felt. hardly any proper exposition for each of these plot ppoints and their respective resolutions. I acknowledge that I came in expecting a story about a young woman utilising her hacking skills and knowledge to fulfill her desire for revenge and to prove her worth, and I guess this was too much. the story feels like a joke, but this is just my personal opinion of course. this story is probably written for people who don't care for rich storytelling, and that's fine. not all stories have to aim for a nobel prize or anything. it's a shame that it's a generic revenge plot accompanied by a doting, powerful CEO where all problems are resolved within paragraphs after introduction; the synopsis was actually really interesting because of their "goals" and the female lead's hacking skills. I don't wish for the author to change anything about the story, because that's not my right. rather, I'm simply reviewing why I don't think highly of this story personally, so please do not misunderstand. thank you.

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A reader's review after 10 chapters. Writing Quality: 3.8/5 I can't say it is a well-written book but it is readable and understandable. For those who aren't grammar nazi, this book will pass for readers just like me. But I must add, the writing gets better by every chapter. Stability Update: well, so far, this book is keeping its pace and update 1 or more chapters a day. Story Development: 4/5 The story development is fast and not boring so far. It's just that it is too predictable which made me lose all interest. Character Design: Here is where this book lacks. characters felt 2D -- I can't feel any emotion and I think everyone is just dumb or to be precise, the people surrounding MC are created to be dumb just for her to stand out with the rest. I advise working on this part more as many readers will focus on your characters whether main characters or the evil ones. World Background: 3/5 I think this world doesn't have any laws. Referring to the blackmailing part and breach of contract because that's not how it really works. Overall, this is recommended for those readers who like light, and well, fluffy storyline with face-slapping. But as for me who likes mystery and suspense, I'm dropping it because it is not my cup of tea or probably it is just downright predictable that didn't pique my interest. To the author, I hope you keep writing despite all the harsh words I just said and prove me and all the others who said almost the same thing wrong. Don't rush your chapters and keep improving the quality and where it lacks. Fighting!

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