Review Detail of Sir_Squirrel in The Holy Chronicles of Baator

alright, first off the amount of plot holes is just astounding the author said that this is a heavy AU but that still doesn't excuse the number of plot holes created by his deviation from the source material, second, i ran into some grammatical errors but they weren't so many as to be a reason to cross out this fic completely the writing is not unreadable so to say it's just that there are some parts that might need some polishing, however, my real problem with the writing and character design is how the author portrayed the character's conversations, for the most part they just sound robotic with no real "life" if that makes sense and half the stuff they say is either chunni or is something you'd expect a xianxia Chinese character to say