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goodlion
goodlionAuthor5yr
2019-09-09 08:06

Anyone who wants to help can comment in the latest chapter, or here, we need editors to improve chapter grammar, who has time to talk to me, I'm sure it will be much better to read with editing, remembering that the best stories here at Webnovel there are always editors to help. https://discord.gg/UVnyMfa

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MightyLion
MightyLionLv5

what is the novel's cultivation system? I still did not get it

slothyhuman
slothyhumanLv12

Your english doesnt seem so bad, so why is the english in the story so bad? It is partly because you need editors. But it looks like it was written by google translate or someone who doesnt speak english well. Its not about editing. Its got so much broken english that should not be there because from what i can tell your english is fine in this comment, and going off that you would expect grammatical errors, not just down right bad and broken english that makes it impossible for native speakers to read.

RawrXDx
RawrXDxLv3

I’ll help if you still need it.

DioSDeLCaoS
DioSDeLCaoSLv10

Es harén?

Aoalbjorn
AoalbjornLv3

I have never complained about grammar as mistakes would happen. But this novel doesn't look like any mistake or something like that. It looks like complete machine translation with a bit of editing here and there.

Cinque_39
Cinque_39Lv11

I would honestly love to help edit this novel. It seems like a nice novel and I do have some spare time during the holidays, I’m still in high school, so I won’t really be free after the holidays but yea, I’d lobe to contribute!

Lordgrim94
Lordgrim94Lv4

Send me a massage if you still want an editor.

Melshan
MelshanLv7

The MC Will have a wife or Harém?

41icia
41iciaLv14

I really want to help edit be happy with sports it’s a pleasant read but the vocabulary holds it back reply u I f you need editor ☺️

Daoist513202
Daoist513202Lv15

👍

Daoist513202
Daoist513202Lv15

👍

_Evergreen
_EvergreenLv3

If you still need an editor send me a message. I will be pleased to oblige

VampirePrince
VampirePrinceLv14

Bro the chapters and English make no sense at all you need to make a lot of improvements I can help you if you're still here

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The_Dark_Sapphire
The_Dark_SapphireLv12

While I star rated this a 4 I think the quality of the story is at best 3.5. The story starts off with a mortal with immense cultivation potential living on a world where cultivation is almost impossible. A master from the Divine Plane comes down to his world and watches over him for 400 years and gives him a cultivation technique that can be used to refine his body by killing others. After 400 years the main character is almost dead a second master comes and the two master pity him being born on a low plane. The masters use their cultivation resources and together send him to a world where he can cultivate and use a forbidden technique to reverse his age to 12. The masters also impart numerous divine techniques and items that will allow him to easily cultivate to the Divine Plane and meet them again. Now on to my thoughts of the story. Overall, the story is interesting as you follow his path to get stronger while avoiding cliches. But, the story has many drawbacks that may disinterest you from reading further into the story. 1. Lack of dialogue: dialogue is scarce in the novel and on many occasions this has left the main character and the people he interacts with have no special characteristics or development. 2. Romance: This is a harem novel and up to chapter 151 so far he has 4 partners and a 5th one is hinted as one of his masters has a granddaughter we will meet in the future. Nothing wrong right? The problem lies in the authors complete avoidance of romantic development that makes you care about his wives . They are just thrown together without any explanation an old you are left to fill in the blanks. Also, as said previously, the lack of dialogue leaves all intamancy for you to make up on your own. (Notice: sex scenes are kept at 1-2 sentences so keep your pants on) 3: After the first few chapter with an introduction that left me thinking that the story would be a 1 in 100 novel I was met with disappointment. While unique in it's own right, the writing style is boring and without life. It follows the same pattern for every chapter. (This happened--->how it happened--->why it happened---->random long info dumo---->mc reaction) 4: fight scenes aren't well described and are anti-climactic 5:There is no perspective of the main character so we have no way to connect with him and have a deeper enjoyment. And the format is monotone and systematic. (It gets boring after a bit) Now that I have put that out, if you are still with me, I will say the highlights of the story. The thing that kept me with this and is keeping me here is the world building. I'd you make it through the explanations and other things, you'll find yourself with a well described system of cultivation and profound understanding of the worlds he visits and how The different planes, creatures, and factions interact. It is easy to understand his power level compared to others and what drives the factions and people he meets to do what they do. Whether this story will interest you is up to you to decide. I think that as long as you preserver through the first 30 or so chapters you will enjoy the story more and come to like it. Thank you for reading this review!!!!!🤪😁👍

TruthFalcon
TruthFalconLv2
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