Review Detail of Wayward_Scholar in Magic Farmer Dara - 2nd Edition
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While I am not a huge fan of historical agriculture, as a whole the idea behind the novel is pretty good and unique. There are plenty of facts scattered throughout the novel that one can relate to in real life. There is also a lot of effort put in towards the development of the main character Dara and world around him as well. There is a ton of detail put into Dara's reactions and thoughts throughout the novel which allows the reader to get a good grasp on his personality. The main con that I would find in this novel however, is grammar. Some of the grammar makes the novel a bit confusing and the documentary-like style it is written in can make it hard to understand when your first starting out. Lastly, while I like effort put into detail, I feel like there's a bit too much. Maybe the author corrected these things in future updates that I did not catch up to, but if the author has time they could edit the initial chapters a bit to make it more accessible to newer readers.
Magic Farmer Dara - 2nd Edition
Gourmet_DAO
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Hmm. I guess one thing I found in chapter 3 was that you could cut down on the listing a bit. Alot of the time your listing a bunch of things to emphasize your topic. You can do this for some topics, but for some I think it's good enough just to use one example. Otherwise keep on writing! According to the ratings your doing a great job already!
Gourmet_DAO:Thanks for the honest criticism, the author will pay attention to this. Now we need to think about how to reduce excessive detail and make the text more simple. Could you advise how to do this? Something to remove, something to add? With thanks
Thank you for your advice! I will take it into account when writing new chapters, and I will rewrite Roan already at its completion. In order not to disappoint readers who are already used to my incomplete text. But I understand that you have pointed out an important error that needs to be fixed. With thanks,
Wayward_Scholar:Hmm. I guess one thing I found in chapter 3 was that you could cut down on the listing a bit. Alot of the time your listing a bunch of things to emphasize your topic. You can do this for some topics, but for some I think it's good enough just to use one example. Otherwise keep on writing! According to the ratings your doing a great job already!