Review Detail of SharpJester in The Demonsong Epic By the Brandon Gould who wrote Chossen Heros of Tylingariea

This is part of a review swap. Sorry for being very late, you do have a very long book. I decided to stop at least midway from when I started to read. Maybe around 218+ since you keep updating. Also warning, this is long. I'll start right off the bat saying that normally this genre is not exactly what I'd read. At least not for this site. So take what you will with a grain of salt. In terms of what I liked about it, the world is actually very interesting when you get to it. I especially enjoyed the tidbits in the beginning of each chapter about what era it was or what city or what not. I also enjoyed the names of the land in general, it definitely makes it feel more fantasy like. I did have a slight intrigue with the different powers and it was a shame I couldn't read more of how exactly they work. Also, great job with the consistent updating with the book. I get new notifications every day since you upload it multiple times per day. Great for those who read the story in it's entirety. There is the fact, however, that you should try to be more descriptive in your writing. Places where a dramatic shot can happen ended up with the even being stated as if it was some history book. I also found that there was a lot of things that had no context at all for being there. Especially when random tidbits of IRL life is thrown in, like when you introduced the main villain as being called (by some) as the slender man. Pieces like these throw the reader out of the immersion and, for a fantasy book, that's not what you want to happen. Especially early on where it could deter new readers. There are a few other things I want to touch upon but I decided this review is long enough as it is. Bottom line is that a little bit of descriptive writing can go a long way with your book and this fantasy world is incredibly interesting when you're able to make sense of it. Best of luck to you dear author. Keep writing!