Review Detail of SilentSolitude in Legendary Evolution (DISCONTINUED)

Hi :3 author here <3 I started my own novel, I‘m quite new to this so sorry :D and also I want to let you know that I'm not that great at English and I'm also not that great when it comes to grammar.. yeah I know I'm a fudging moron :P but I just want to create novel and share what world I can create, I have many ideas how can I progress this story smoothly.. you can criticize me if you want, point out the wrong word, help me the grammar that will help me a lot tnx, let me say it again English is not my first language so sorry I'm not that good and also not good at the grammar so bear with me hehe xd