Review Detail of WithJ in Dropped---

Normally I would break down my reviews into updates, characters, world and story but since this is a one-short, it’s kind of not applicable. Just something I noticed about the dialogues though... Original: "If you still want to stick to her, go ahead." The blonde said turning her back. "Wait! No! I don't want to! Who wants to be with a mute?! Let's go." The girl said desperately, clinging to the blonde. Edited: "If you still want to stick to her, go ahead,” the blonde said turning her back. "Wait! No! I don't want to! Who wants to be with a mute?! Let's go,” the girl said desperately, clinging to the blonde. ^A comma should be used and not a period because dialogue tags are following the dialogues. This one-shot is definitely not for the faint-hearted. It is very heavy and filled with angst, depression, loneliness from a teenager bullied by her peers because of her speech impairment. When Yui painted that picture, I was silently screaming in my head why the instructor did not see that was a cry for help?! I know it was a one-shot but at the end, I was still kind of wondering why she killed her first love? Anyway, what can I say, sadly bullying is too real a problem.