Review Detail of vchan in deleted_book_

So first thing I noticeed: This book is great at showing and not telling. I'm used to stories with telling so this is a different view as there are more dialogue involved. It's comical in the beginning the dialogue how the cute guy Frankie in the beginning didn't remmeber Sara. Maybe I just wished his appearancewas explained much more. WOW lmao that butt sqeeze in the beginning got me like what bro?! Haha will your story have smut scenes too?? I couldn't stop grinning at her reaction in the next chapter. So yes, I really like that you hav excellent writing and your strength is your dialogue for me too because I enjoy hearing your main character interact with others, funny and engaging. I love Assasin's Creed btw...I assume they'r elike best buddies since they play games. I wonder if he likes or why he keep touching her lmao. She got smart to stay at her friend's house but then again, it seems like she is somewhat attracted. Each chapter was so much fun and so relatable as we see inside her mind and know what she is thinking. Okay so dialogue and characters are nice, nothing to complain from me. I notice small grammar errors but that's pretty normal cause I don't make my story perfect too. Perhaps the only thing is for more descriptions on places and how people looked? I really like the two main characters lol, made me laugh and waiting for them to interact all the time. Nice touch in adding the different POV too. Other side stories always interesting to see. (The main character is like me, I curse way too much haha) Awaiting more updates!!