Review Detail of XOMatsumaeohana in deleted_book_

Part of a review swap- Review Valid as of Chapter 3 Writing Quality: A few things I noticed Chapter 1- ?", ---> ?" (Get rid of the comma, it's not necessary unless your writing something like..here's an example of a random sentence "I understand what you mean but," he drawled and continued, "This is my ) I think I panicked and froze should be in the same sentence, no need to separate them. Chapter 2--> he was shook --> rewrite it - He was shocked 🤔 I think you could describe the characters actions and movements more. You could add this with the speaking dialogue, Chapter 2--> and just wanted to grab you..I'm sorry -->" could rewrite it like this ----> "and just wanted to grab you," Frank avoided my gaze, and yet quickly apologized, "I"m sorry." Chapter 3--> TWICE --> Twice (No need to capitalize this, I realize you want to emphasise the word. But one does not need to capitalize unless it is necessary. You could have easily used an action to describe this) for example --> Twice! I emphasised and repeated the word twice in my mind. A lot of speaking dialouge that requires extra description 🤔 Right now when I'm reading, it's hard to tell who is speaking. Character Design: Only the starting chapters, so I cannot judge. I do have the impression of a strong female lead however and hopefully this remains consistent as the story goes by. Story Development and World Background: Can't judge yet. But based on the summary, the story is certainly interesting. I will keep this in my library.