Review Detail of Nou in Nightmare - The Eternal Curse

The novel starts off with a wide cast of characters, thrown one in after another. Think "Game of Thrones"/"Lord of the Rings"/"The Way of Kings" kind of deal. Multiple characters, multiple stories. However, things feel a bit shoved too fast. I can't connect to any of them. Its too jarred/disconnected for me. The story looks like it has potential. Decent hook, decent reel. It could potentially be an exorcist-type of novel. But everything's blurring too fast, and I feel like I'm on a one-way train that's zipping by. Grammar wise, I really really really recommend you going back and running this through some sort of spell-checker.