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azurebellLv45yr
2019-05-24 06:46

The story is interesting. But i found the FL character less believable with few flaws making its character and plot a little boring. The novel isnt bad instaead the story line is very good just that i dont feel it believable that the FL is someone from the underworld that to an heiress of someone powerful in the underworld. Her actions gives away to her being someone from the underworld. As a person being in the dark for most of her life should be cautious of her every step that too at a time when theres a bounty on her head plus when she suddenly gets tonkonw about her twin sis from her sister's foster father when she is on the run how and why couldnt she find it suspicious. This i felt was the most foolish thing she did agreeing to her sister's foster fathers plans without any suspicion. The first thing she did in the story made me feel she a fake but i let go and read the rest then again found her in similar situations which given her circumstances and descriptions should have done better..her weak character description makes her less convincing makeing the story a little dull and boring where her actions csn be seen through from before.

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Bodoskid_Bodoskid
Bodoskid_BodoskidLv1

Nice

Bodoskid_Bodoskid
Bodoskid_BodoskidLv1

Nice

bettasefuiva40
bettasefuiva40Lv5

She's amazing

bettasefuiva40
bettasefuiva40Lv5

She's amazing

Maria_Alvarado
Maria_AlvaradoLv3

Ohhh I’ll keep that in mind

ronald0711
ronald0711Lv4

What a nice story

Blu_Jay
Blu_JayLv4

Ya actually she has a mafia background and she can't realize she is being tailed should I say she is too trusting or just outright gullible

ronald0711
ronald0711Lv4

Over all the plot of the story makes me excites

ronald0711
ronald0711Lv4

Over all the plot of the story makes me excites

RoZila
RoZilaLv13

I agree with you. The character description is poor, one moment she is strong and next she does something so foolish like she is not that strong in that sense.

rachel_blake
rachel_blakeLv3

I agree shes a bit naive. Everyone figured out who she is and everyone that wants a peice of her easily found her and were watching her. So skill level is very low to be what she is. I still live the story though.

s_c125
s_c125Lv4

I’ll like to disagree. From what I’ve read so far, she was sheltered and did not want any part of the underworld life. If anything, it made sense that she wasn’t aware that she was tailed and her agreeing to the plan. She’s naive and I think she’ll probably develop well as the story progresses.

Moonsun_Moonsun
Moonsun_MoonsunLv4

I had a doubt ya....fl sister married ml bez of certain circumstance but she loves Jonny then how the hell did she live with ml as real hudband n wife. at least she can avoid something's right...it didnt mean she cheated johnny as well as ml ah

Alf_Fernando
Alf_FernandoLv4

I've been waiting for this novel to be one of the free limited to read... thank you

Ashlee_Pinkerton
Ashlee_PinkertonLv10

Its so good

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