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Unknownlion
UnknownlionLv145yr
2020-03-07 10:53

Love the concept you have going on for your story! Loving it so far and looking forward for the upcoming chapter! Please no harem because of I have to be honest it doesn't fit with his personality. Nevertheles, Keep up with the great work and work your imagination to the fullest! Hope you update once again sometime soon!

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Dr_Doctor
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A good story. But it suffers heavily from two things: Really bad pacing and a boring MC. 14 chapters in and the MC becomes the most powerful thing in the Universe. He's practically unkillable and nothing is stronger than him - and that's just with his physical prowess and without magic. He became too powerful and too quickly. I'd also like to say that the protagonist is as boring as a brick. Everything he does is calculated - he doesn't feel like anything more than some Original who wants strength and to be the perfect being. He's obsessed with knowledge and that's his only reason to exist. He's literally nothing more than that trait and it's boring to read about. He kills someone. What's the reason? It somehow helped him either grow in strength or gain knowledge. He makes a supernatural-version of the Illuminati. What's the reason? So he can have an information network that has it's fingers in all the pies available and lets the MC control the world from behind the scenes for--you guessed it--more information and power. Don't get me wrong, this story was good and quite interesting. But there's nothing more to it than a simple power-trip. All the MC does is look for more ways to gain power and information. It was fine when it was just a few chapters of that but 14 straight chapters of power-ups? That's a bit excessive. I'd be willing to ignore it as well if the characters were well-fleshed out and fun to read about. Or if there were good interactions in the first place. But no, there's no interesting dialogue between characters because the MC is just cold and uninterested in connecting with people. He doesn't even care about his family - not even when one of them dies. He's got the emotional range of a rock. Everything also seems to go his way and he has a contingency plan for everything. This is an interesting premise for a novel. Very much so. But the bad pacing and flat protagonist just mar this story too much for me, personally.

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