Review Detail of Randomguy791 in Another Naruto Fanfic (Just for fun)
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plot holes everywhere. some actions and events are not even logically possible. a 1 day old baby already starts killing. WTF?! a baby can't even crawl until after about half a year at the earliest and walking by 1. Even more incomprehensible is the fact that the baby, our MC suddenly knows how to use the transformation jutsu despite having never been taught to control chackra. and somewhere, somehow, our baby mc can run a distance that takes a week of travel in 1 day, fight with ***** thieves, and win. author explains it all as a superpower gained from reincarnating and that his sociopath behavior is from a rough life and suicide... if you can accept this explanation, you might enjoy this novel, if not, walk away because the contents are illogical and it seems the author will continue with that direction.
Another Naruto Fanfic (Just for fun)
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TBH, I don't think that is a a plot hole... What I think might be really considered a plot hole, is him having to use (Mind Body Disturbance Technique) to get the memory of the ppl... Even though his power does the same... Get's all of victim's exp if killed them. Get a part of their exp if he fought them (ever 15 minutes). There is also a lot of plotholes like this one ^. Keep on mind I started writing this while I was depressed, so I was more emotional than I am regularly. So yeah... If you didn't enjoy my first fanfic ever, that is fine! I will never be able to make everyone happy with this, nor will I be able to fail so hard that no one would like it. Hope you find something good to read someday :D
Using the mind body disturbance technique to get experience and memories wouldn't be a plot hole in my opinion, but rather, a (quite broken) method to quickly power up the main character. The plot hole of that scenario would be how the MC even obtained that technique in the first place. Many other novels has something similar to make their MC over powered, which if done early, makes the story lose all of its suspense and direction as it'll be hard to create strong enemies/obstacles to move the story along. Your novel did take a unique and original path though so it is very interesting and definitely hooks a reader in. However, while it does hook a reader in, whether or not that reader stays depends on their ability to ignore the logical errors.
Voidne:TBH, I don't think that is a a plot hole... What I think might be really considered a plot hole, is him having to use (Mind Body Disturbance Technique) to get the memory of the ppl... Even though his power does the same... Get's all of victim's exp if killed them. Get a part of their exp if he fought them (ever 15 minutes). There is also a lot of plotholes like this one ^. Keep on mind I started writing this while I was depressed, so I was more emotional than I am regularly. So yeah... If you didn't enjoy my first fanfic ever, that is fine! I will never be able to make everyone happy with this, nor will I be able to fail so hard that no one would like it. Hope you find something good to read someday :D
no no, his special power is to be able to gain people memory and experience when killing them or fighting them ( every 15 minutes ). So using mind body disturbance technique is not necassery tbh... Specially if he was going to kill them anyway. It is a plot hole 100%
Randomguy791:Using the mind body disturbance technique to get experience and memories wouldn't be a plot hole in my opinion, but rather, a (quite broken) method to quickly power up the main character. The plot hole of that scenario would be how the MC even obtained that technique in the first place. Many other novels has something similar to make their MC over powered, which if done early, makes the story lose all of its suspense and direction as it'll be hard to create strong enemies/obstacles to move the story along. Your novel did take a unique and original path though so it is very interesting and definitely hooks a reader in. However, while it does hook a reader in, whether or not that reader stays depends on their ability to ignore the logical errors.