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angelica_alcantara
angelica_alcantaraLv35yr
2019-08-11 14:24

This story is kinda nice but what the hell i just read! I meet an alien and give me a choice?? Seriously the other recarnate story will hide the truth about being reborn, this story was amazing but the flow of the story was kinda, you know?(im being nice so i will not tell you in blunt word) so next time try next time your character will start in beginning and he will accomplish the missions the system will give? You write this character with system so?System will guide him to became the best not overpower in the start because that was boring like, what the hell! No thrilled in the story. And lastly, pls use basic English word if you can't really apply it perfectly. (Me too I have poor grammar but someone can read it without nosebleed and understandable) That's all! I hope you will improve (this story will became unpredictable if you just put some thrilled and the character not began in overpower because everyone will struggle from the start before they achieve their goals.)

Ball Master

Daydreamer_5a
3.8
24 Chs

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