Review Detail of Oppsie_Doopsie in Golden Dawn (Naruto X Justice League)

Thanks. Can you give example from the first chapter. Like is it all of them or 50/50.

Well mostly in the beginning like 1-15 then u improved a bit

But still it's still feel like u know, u need to put something to make the reader know the emotion of the character when reader read the dialogue well in the simple words the dialogue between chara in 1-15 really really unnatural that it seems they forced to talk when they angry or in bad mood. But its still good story

Thanks. This is like the draft version since I am posting what I write directly. It gets better when I finish up a. Part and go back to the start since now I know what I am writing. Once I finish the second arc I will edit all of it to build the relationship better, details and etc. Stories like Marvel and DC give me this problem because the world is too vast. I am always asking for people's opinions so that I can make it better but barely anyone actually does that. It's really sad. I even go out of my way to add details in parts that readers think is lacking. As a writer I can see the picture in my head so I end up missing things when I am writing.