Review Detail of ReviewBrah in None89900000

Only the beginning is happy and it becomes darker as the story continues. This is not a happy story but a tragic one. In the beginning I am establishing the Utopia that Naruto created by the end of his story before destroying it as the story continues to introduce the alien monsters. I agree on the information dump. I will see what I can do and if you have suggestions than that's cool.

well my only suggestion is to not expose all of the character in one go. Maybe make it look natural? For example when u goes to ichiraku ramen u meet with ur son natsu for example. There also the fact that we don't get enough backstory for the dragon of universe, the immortal, the britain(??). But all of the surface of the backstory from the three in on 1-2 chapter. Thus making reader hard to remember. You are lucky tho because its fanfic and everyone know who is Boruto and Arthuria lul. Its the same symptom with xianxia. Too many name, less development character for your oc to make reader familiar with him. But xianxia author is smart enough to kill them all so we won't have to memorize it lmao.

The things introduced earlier get more detailed when it focuses on them. When they visit the dragons you will see more about them. When it focuses on the immortals you get more about them. The current chapters have focused on the Immortals, how does that feel. The characters as well, more detail is given and there thoughts are explored when they come on screen. This is has happened throughout but mostly focused on Naruto and Boruto. How does it feel? Is it okay like that? The story is very long so it won't be problem to slowly explore them and show changes in the characters. Each part will focus on some characters to explore them and the location. Which is why I have put down the seeds for future plots points in the setting and conversations.