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Xodous
XodousLv134yr
2020-06-07 13:07

I tried to read this. I got up to chapter 20 before I couldn't do it any more. The ideas are interesting and has potential. But the writing... and inconsistencies.

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TrueDawn
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You know I can see the reading status, right?

Adam
AdamLv5

You know people go back to check something, which moves their reading status, right? happens to me all the time, as when I'm writing a review I wanna check to make sure a point I made was right. same as if I clicked the last chapter without reading any of them, it'd show last chapter

TrueDawn:You know I can see the reading status, right?
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