Review Detail of Vynris_Foxtail in Star wars : Champion of the force

The world background is good but maybe but a tad bit into it more and show the area around mc more...an example would be...if let's this random person has a minimap but it just show like 1km away or something...why not make it more useful and make it at least 1 or 2km more so that we can get more of a view of the universe (or whatever) it is in then just the places he is not the places he is at...like example more what's around him then what's in fount of him...just so you know I'm not that great at explaining things so I try to use a round about way...just take it as you did a good job but dig deeper into your imagination and/the story as if you are in it...to others that want to read this and/or want a good star wars story that goes fast but not too fast that you a lost all the time then this may be for you...I recommend going through two chapters at least just to know that is at least ok if not good for you...or well ok at least in general if not good... **, GOOD JOP AND PLEASE KEEP IT UP AS LONG AS YOU CAN OR AT LEAST DO NOT DELETE IT...YAYA...B