Review Detail of ZGearCecil in Star wars : Champion of the force

Great Read, though there could be some improvements on Writing Quality, mostly punctuation since there are a number of commas in the beginning when there should be more period. I think it would be better to introduce new information without parentheses, via character's thoughts and acknowledgements. I can't wait to learn more about the World State that Death had created by placing him in the Star Wars Universe with his own unique background. Though I will have to suggest a bit more research on Star Wars Canon, as English is verbally spoken through both Galactic Basic Standard and High Galactic. Overall Story Development is pretty good, though I think some of the chapters can be squeezed together due to their length, and following the same idea of waking up. Thank you for the delicious Fan Fiction!