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Earthshaker34
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writing Quality - I can't say that his grammar sense is bad and I can't say that it is great as well, so 3/5 it is. Story development - it's just terrible MC sees slavers, decides they are savages, kills them all without showing an ounce of mercy and in the next chapter he gets slave of his own. and not to say anything about the 'battle' with slavers taking more than 4.5 hours which is just absurd. Character Design - it's bad, that's all i can say. MC is just psychopath by default because he is a gamer. shows absolutely no reaction to the death of slavers, he uses his drones to make their heads explode and again absolutely no reaction. when he frees the slaves he takes out the guns and ammo from his inventory and again, absolutely no reaction from them. and when he gains slave he just straight up has *** with her... he talks with slaves like nothing while he is supposed to be a neat who knows nothing of the human interactions of the outside world... Writing Quality 3/5 Stability of updates 4/5 because of the fact that it is in the early stages and I will not rate it with 5 stars just yet Story development 1/5 Character Design 1/5 World Background 3/5 just because of the fact that I have only read 11 chapters and there isn't much of a world background explained

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The Gamer's Apocalypse

HellionPrime

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HellionPrime
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Thanks for the feedback. You are the second person who highlighted that the MC has no feelings/remorse. You mentioned that as a neet and should act differently. There's this little thing in Chapter 5. "With the new skills, Adam seems to gain the courage he once lacked in his previous life. Normally in situations like this, Adam will simply ignore it and find some excuse to do something else. However, with the game like system in his head. With some sick and twisted mentality. He views this situation as a game. Adam, inside the game world is a renowned player. He is among the top. His attitude in game is way different compared to his real self. Now with all of his game like ability, his gamer's instinct kicked in." Anyways, I dont think I really need to explain what it means when I stated that the MC is on a totally different mindset right? I'm not sure if you were able to read that part, I think you did since you mentioned that you already read the story up to chapter 11... (lol) I think you can get from chapter 1 to chapter 54 in just under 30 mins of continuous reading. You just have to stop at CHAPTER 11 to tell everybody that you already have a good grasp of the story. ^^ So by getting to CHAPTER 11 you already know how poor the story's development is gonna be.... You already have a good understanding right... OK. At that point you also grasped that the MC design is aweful, and that the information about the world is lacking...... lol at CHAPTER 11.... okay. I dont know if you've writen anything before and posted it publicly. A writer like me who just posted a new story in a new platform, I cant really use the first 20 chapters of my story just saying that the MC is good and that he brushes his teeth everyday and the sun is blue instead of yellow or that the earth is not the 3rd planet but actually is the 9th. I'll probably bore you guys to death if I overloaded my the first 10 chapters with inconsequential things that you cant relate to yet. For writers like us who needs to get our story out there, the first 10 to 30 chapters are crucial. We have to get the readers attention on those first chapters. The other details can be build later on when we already have your attention. A casual reader will only read the first 5 to 10 chapters before they throw it out if they lost interest. I have personally closed alot of novels in this site after reading the first 5 chapters, simply because I lost interest or because I got overloaded with information that does not make any sense yet. So yeah since you're already done reading the first 10 chapters, if you go further you'll probably find out all those things that you're looking for. For me though once you go further that 10, then that means my 1st ten chapters did what they were supposed to do. ^^ Go through my story again. I think the world development questions that you're loking for starts being explained at chapter 12.

Earthshaker34
Earthshaker34Lv6Earthshaker34

first of all about that world development I gave the novel 3/5 on world development because A) I haven't read enough chapters to be able to decide correctly how many stars it deserves. B) there wasn't that much of world development in the first few chapters which I feel like didn't give me permission of sorts to give it 4/5 rating. for Story and Character development the one thing I disliked was how he acted like a hypocrite with the slavers, he killed them, claiming they were savages and the next chapter is just titled as a "my own little slave" I just can't find myself liking it.

HellionPrime:Thanks for the feedback. You are the second person who highlighted that the MC has no feelings/remorse. You mentioned that as a neet and should act differently. There's this little thing in Chapter 5. "With the new skills, Adam seems to gain the courage he once lacked in his previous life. Normally in situations like this, Adam will simply ignore it and find some excuse to do something else. However, with the game like system in his head. With some sick and twisted mentality. He views this situation as a game. Adam, inside the game world is a renowned player. He is among the top. His attitude in game is way different compared to his real self. Now with all of his game like ability, his gamer's instinct kicked in." Anyways, I dont think I really need to explain what it means when I stated that the MC is on a totally different mindset right? I'm not sure if you were able to read that part, I think you did since you mentioned that you already read the story up to chapter 11... (lol) I think you can get from chapter 1 to chapter 54 in just under 30 mins of continuous reading. You just have to stop at CHAPTER 11 to tell everybody that you already have a good grasp of the story. ^^ So by getting to CHAPTER 11 you already know how poor the story's development is gonna be.... You already have a good understanding right... OK. At that point you also grasped that the MC design is aweful, and that the information about the world is lacking...... lol at CHAPTER 11.... okay. I dont know if you've writen anything before and posted it publicly. A writer like me who just posted a new story in a new platform, I cant really use the first 20 chapters of my story just saying that the MC is good and that he brushes his teeth everyday and the sun is blue instead of yellow or that the earth is not the 3rd planet but actually is the 9th. I'll probably bore you guys to death if I overloaded my the first 10 chapters with inconsequential things that you cant relate to yet. For writers like us who needs to get our story out there, the first 10 to 30 chapters are crucial. We have to get the readers attention on those first chapters. The other details can be build later on when we already have your attention. A casual reader will only read the first 5 to 10 chapters before they throw it out if they lost interest. I have personally closed alot of novels in this site after reading the first 5 chapters, simply because I lost interest or because I got overloaded with information that does not make any sense yet. So yeah since you're already done reading the first 10 chapters, if you go further you'll probably find out all those things that you're looking for. For me though once you go further that 10, then that means my 1st ten chapters did what they were supposed to do. ^^ Go through my story again. I think the world development questions that you're loking for starts being explained at chapter 12.
DeepDarkFantasy
DeepDarkFantasyLv10DeepDarkFantasy

This is the review you are looking for. The writing is absurd, the decision of the MC is just ridiculous the author doesn't factor it other human being interaction. He spend hours murdering slavers gets slaves and they have as much emotion as an NPC. Don't take a car to the zoo because it will attract monsters, this is a problem because? After you spent time making the MC badass. The authors comment in this review is disgusting you messed up your story, and you blame reviewers for it. I haven't made a movie before, you going to say I have no right to review a movie? Its your job as the author to make this entertaining enough to read through 50 chapters and not the readers obligations before writing a review.

Rentonomi
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I kind of feel like the MC has a combination of the "Gamer's Mind" from the manga the Gamer, and the cold mind of a guy who reincarnated from the past to take revenge or something like that.

ToSuckmyBalls
ToSuckmyBallsLv4ToSuckmyBalls

Even reading your review I'll give it a try, good luck to me

HellionPrime
HellionPrimeAuthorHellionPrime

"Its your job as the author to make this entertaining enough to read through 50 chapters and not the readers obligations before writing a review." Thats funny you mentioned that I have an obligation to you... Oh wise sir! Can you enlighten me as to why I suddenly have an obligation to you? Can you tell me why I somehow have an obligation to make you happy. Who are you again? Do I owe you something? Did you perhaps paid me money to write this story? Can you please refresh my memory. For me to be obligated to do something that you wish, there should have been something there to oblige me to do so. This is a free website is it not? I did not ask you or even forced you to read my story. Its really funny if you think about it. I mean where the hell did you get the notion that you are entitled to demand anything from me? Freeloader.

DeepDarkFantasy:This is the review you are looking for. The writing is absurd, the decision of the MC is just ridiculous the author doesn't factor it other human being interaction. He spend hours murdering slavers gets slaves and they have as much emotion as an NPC. Don't take a car to the zoo because it will attract monsters, this is a problem because? After you spent time making the MC badass. The authors comment in this review is disgusting you messed up your story, and you blame reviewers for it. I haven't made a movie before, you going to say I have no right to review a movie? Its your job as the author to make this entertaining enough to read through 50 chapters and not the readers obligations before writing a review.
DeepDarkFantasy
DeepDarkFantasyLv10DeepDarkFantasy

tldr here we have the authors standard response of bombarding negative reviews with walls of text. OMEGALUL

HellionPrime:"Its your job as the author to make this entertaining enough to read through 50 chapters and not the readers obligations before writing a review." Thats funny you mentioned that I have an obligation to you... Oh wise sir! Can you enlighten me as to why I suddenly have an obligation to you? Can you tell me why I somehow have an obligation to make you happy. Who are you again? Do I owe you something? Did you perhaps paid me money to write this story? Can you please refresh my memory. For me to be obligated to do something that you wish, there should have been something there to oblige me to do so. This is a free website is it not? I did not ask you or even forced you to read my story. Its really funny if you think about it. I mean where the hell did you get the notion that you are entitled to demand anything from me? Freeloader.
HellionPrime
HellionPrimeAuthorHellionPrime

Hmmm. For a guy who pretends to have the credential to criticize other's work to be too lazy to read such a short comment. What? cant handle the truth in my reply so you try to look cool and hide behind TLDR???

DeepDarkFantasy:tldr here we have the authors standard response of bombarding negative reviews with walls of text. OMEGALUL
DeepDarkFantasy
DeepDarkFantasyLv10DeepDarkFantasy

hahahaha author deleting comments FYI there should be a comment above this one

HellionPrime
HellionPrimeAuthorHellionPrime

? Lame... is that short enough for you?

HellionPrime
HellionPrimeAuthorHellionPrime

Stop changing the subject. Freeloader.

Earthshaker34
Earthshaker34Lv6Earthshaker34

Mate you are the one saying that if i had read till latest chapters i might not have said the things i have. and he has answered with the same thing i have said, which is that it is through your work that you should entice us to read further and certainly not by future promises. That's not how an author should do things.

Imrael
ImraelLv5Imrael

You owned it like a boss 😎😂😂😂😂😂😂😂 moral of the story this novel is not for the faint of heart if you are a sissy go be a sissy somewhere else I didn't read the story and just from these comments I'm already liking it (my first impression is this story displays humanity assets primal nature without rules or restrictions) of course I still have to read it to give a full impression but I am interested 😁😜

HellionPrime:"Its your job as the author to make this entertaining enough to read through 50 chapters and not the readers obligations before writing a review." Thats funny you mentioned that I have an obligation to you... Oh wise sir! Can you enlighten me as to why I suddenly have an obligation to you? Can you tell me why I somehow have an obligation to make you happy. Who are you again? Do I owe you something? Did you perhaps paid me money to write this story? Can you please refresh my memory. For me to be obligated to do something that you wish, there should have been something there to oblige me to do so. This is a free website is it not? I did not ask you or even forced you to read my story. Its really funny if you think about it. I mean where the hell did you get the notion that you are entitled to demand anything from me? Freeloader.
Imrael
ImraelLv5Imrael

Seriously man you do know a novel can't always please everybody from my point of view the lack of too much emotion is a new experience you should enjoy and if you want something too emotional go look for something else that suits your personality don't always judge a story from your emotional point of you alone look at it from a neutral perspective then you could judge it whether it's good or not most people can't do that after all we are emotional creatures the most emotional on this planet anyway if your problem is only the emotional part and from what you described there are plenty of people who exhibit such behaviors like the MC that just shows that the author succeeded in producing the aspect of a personality without compromising it... You probably won't understand much from what I say just know that the story is good take my word for it or don't that's your choice 😉

Earthshaker34:Mate you are the one saying that if i had read till latest chapters i might not have said the things i have. and he has answered with the same thing i have said, which is that it is through your work that you should entice us to read further and certainly not by future promises. That's not how an author should do things.
Earthshaker34
Earthshaker34Lv6Earthshaker34

You are right about people not being able to review novels from neutral standpoint but I dont think I wrote this review or those comments while being emotional. I just dont get it why you think so. I've read few chapters of this novel and found it unbearable for reasons listed above. What do you think, Would I have given this novel as high of a rating as I did, it I wrote this novel while being emotional?

Imrael:Seriously man you do know a novel can't always please everybody from my point of view the lack of too much emotion is a new experience you should enjoy and if you want something too emotional go look for something else that suits your personality don't always judge a story from your emotional point of you alone look at it from a neutral perspective then you could judge it whether it's good or not most people can't do that after all we are emotional creatures the most emotional on this planet anyway if your problem is only the emotional part and from what you described there are plenty of people who exhibit such behaviors like the MC that just shows that the author succeeded in producing the aspect of a personality without compromising it... You probably won't understand much from what I say just know that the story is good take my word for it or don't that's your choice 😉
Earthshaker34
Earthshaker34Lv6Earthshaker34

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Earthshaker34:You are right about people not being able to review novels from neutral standpoint but I dont think I wrote this review or those comments while being emotional. I just dont get it why you think so. I've read few chapters of this novel and found it unbearable for reasons listed above. What do you think, Would I have given this novel as high of a rating as I did, it I wrote this novel while being emotional?
Imrael
ImraelLv5Imrael

Unbearable but realistic that is the point of it usually writers try to approached their novels in the more realistic way and you're telling me all that is listed in the above is not human nature ?

Earthshaker34:You are right about people not being able to review novels from neutral standpoint but I dont think I wrote this review or those comments while being emotional. I just dont get it why you think so. I've read few chapters of this novel and found it unbearable for reasons listed above. What do you think, Would I have given this novel as high of a rating as I did, it I wrote this novel while being emotional?
Earthshaker34
Earthshaker34Lv6Earthshaker34

Realistic?! 4 and a half hour stand off where bandits do absolutely nothing and mc just does nothing but wait for half an hour each to summon a drone? He is supposed to be neet who knows jack **** about human interactions but chapters with slaves tell us otherwise. Other humans act like fucking NPCs. Unbearable and unrealistic. There may be some elements which are realistic, but I am not talking about them.

Imrael:Unbearable but realistic that is the point of it usually writers try to approached their novels in the more realistic way and you're telling me all that is listed in the above is not human nature ?
David_Drake
David_DrakeLv4David_Drake

Honestly the author should just ignore all the comments. That way no one gets their feelings hurt.