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Fabrice_Ojong
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2020-04-20 09:22

Hola author I'm new here ,great story lobe it but check out the English P.s no criticism I can always ignore but how bout doing so to make it perfect.

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CamilleJuteau
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Hello and thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. I just updated the story with a new chapter. Cheers.

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