Review Detail of Bossyjls in She transmigrated and started different life

I can feel your excitement and love of writing from this piece. This is from a teacher's point of view. I HIGHLY recommend that the author goes back and edits what has already been written to polish this piece. Omitted words, punctuation issues and garbled sentences may be hindering the readers from connecting with your story. I truly mean this review to be a suggestion that will help you improve your craft and not as a criticism.