Review Detail of Legion20 in The Birth of a Monster (The First Vampire I)

Deleted my old review after finishing book 1. this is the update one. Writing quality: 4 stars The author has a good style, clear and capable of conveying well the feelings of the characters and the world around them. There are some grammatical mistakes each chapter, but the author is fixing them, also they are far from bothersome. The real problem is that both the chars and too many dialogs seem forced, litterally stuffed down the reader's throat. Stability of updates 5stars: author promises, author delivers. Story development 3 stars: The plot development is slow, also some things are a bit too forced for my taste. The story takes some twists that contradict what happened earlier, and tbh i do not like it. Also several plotholes are present. Char development 1 stars: The MC is monstrously cliched (smart, handsome, sensible, honest bla, bla bla) not to mention that at just 9 years is a paragon of wisdom despite being quite silent and introverted. (that plus the fact that always at 9 yo he already has girls fighting for him...). The rest of the cast is well depicted and fleshed out, tho, i really like how the author describes their attitudes and feelings. why 2 stars then? Because the MC is unbearable and unbelievable. He gets injustly imprisoned, tortured, starved for years, and is still goody goody. then he gets r*aped (yes, r*aped) goes to the dark side, and then the author goes back to him being good thanks to a deus ex. Either he is a saint or has no brain. His BFF aegin is made of cardboard, becomes friend with the MC because his great-great-etc grandfather was a vampire sernvat too. cool explanation for a bromance at first sight, uh? All the char, and i mean all of them are either idiotic, or forced cuz author hand or just made of cardboard. World background 4 stars: The world is interesting and so is the whole set up. No idiotic useless info dumps, the author only gives what you need when you need it. No 5 stars because plotholes even in WB. 3.4 is the final score. I dropped this after book 1.