Review Detail of T0X1N in Reborn Might Guy

Ok that broccoli gag made me chuckle, I'll give you that. Although i don't have the time t read the entire fic, I'll say this. The main thing you need to improve on is your pacing an layout. Things happen pretty fast, and you need to be more descriptive with your writing. I also fall victim to this, so I feel you brother. As for the grammar, its decent but could use some work. Not really a problem tho, considering the standard here. The jokes were good, and I think you got Guy's personality down perfectly. Like I said, that broccoli part made me laugh! have a good day, and work hard!